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By : Xagzan

From Obsession1988 on March 20, 2008
Chapter 17
I must say that the whole scene with the EYA trio was very well done. Yuka's reaction upon first entering their room to find InuYasha fucking someone other than Kagome was perfect. It was very realistic how at first she was so furious that she did not even recognize what it was exactally that she was witnessing. Then she finally calmed down enough to reevaluate the situation and realise that Kagome was acting as just an observer to the whole situation. I don't think I could have done a better job myself. However, I will say that there was one thing I believe should have done a little differently. When everyone finally realizes that Sota was listening in on their conversation you didn't have any type of reaction from InuYasha. I know that he was not really in a condition to have any type of a 'normall' reaction, but it would have been nice to at least have what he was thinking at that moment written out.
There was really only one surpprise for me in this chapter and that was Eri. I was fully prepared and expecting one of the girls to come out and ask if Kagome would mind sharing InuYasha with any of them as well, but I was not however prepared for Eri asking about Sango. Now that I think about it though, I believe Yuka and Aumi should have had a little bit more of a reaction to just finding out that one of their closest friends was bi. I would have expected them to become a little apprehensive about being too close to her. I mean, just finding something like that out would make a lot of people nervous or at the very least a little uneasy around that person now that there may be a chance they're attracted to you.
Other than those two things the whole chapter was very well put together and very easy to fallow (you didn't jumble anything up or make it seem too cluttered). Nice job.
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From SSJ04Mewtwo on March 12, 2008
Good chapter. I'll ignore the other couples in this story. I'm parcial to SessxRen, but I won't complain. Hope to see the next one soon.
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From SSJ04Mewtwo on March 07, 2008
Good chapter. You'll pardon me for not believing you that the next chapter is going to be the last one. What was that at the end of this chapter? What the fox react like that when Sess grunted? Or was it his reaction to Sess snoring? Lol! Anyway, this Mewtwo shall wait for the next chapter.
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From ANON - Anon on March 07, 2008
great update... that was an interesting chapter... they handled it better that what was expected... that's a good thing for kagome though... glad that they're all together again... now just waiting on the birth of the pups... update when you can... please and thank you...
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From Verakum on March 04, 2008
i did reviewed you once... but who cares im just gonna say you catch perfectly the way inuyasha and kagome are specially sango too, also the plot is very HOT, beautiful cool and more... keep it going plz... i wanna know how do imagine kagomes kids... to see if they are the same way i think...

btw i imagined something like that night when kagomes friend discovered inu.... i think it would be like that XD
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From SSJ04Mewtwo on March 02, 2008
Oooh, an evil cliffy. This Mewtwo needs to see the next chapter up soon.
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From Obsession1988 on March 01, 2008
Perfect. Absolutly perfect. I can not possibly think of a better way for the trio to find out about InuYasha being involved with both Kagome and Sango. As soon as you had Sango announce that she was awake I was almost hoping that someone would walk in on them. I was definitly not dissapointed. Now, when you continue on in the next chapter you have to have Kagome and Sango a little on edge and pissed off because Kagome still was not stated and Sango had hardly any time with InuYasha at all. That would mean they will have a LOT of sexual frustration that needs to be let out but it is being out on hold.... For a while. Also I doubt that either of them would be able to go back to sleep until ALL of their desires have been satisfied.
It would also be a nice add in if you had InuYasha repermanding Sota for having a crush on one of HIS mates.
The only thing in this chapter that I might have done a little differently would be writing out more of the conversation with the trio, explaning where Kagome has been going and who and what InuYasha really is. I personally like to read the different reactions people have to various things and you can be very creative when it comes to Eri, Yuka, and Ayumi.
It seems as though you are going to be having InuYasha, Kagome, and Sango in the future for a while longer, so it would be nice to have a smaller scene that shows what is happening on the other side of the well.... Just a thought.
Oh! And do not forget to have someone explain to the trio that Kagome and Sango are mated to InuYasha and what that entails.

Just a small request.... Can you have Hojo coming to visit Kagome in this story somewhere? Be nice to see his reaction to the whole situation.

Great job overall, and I hope the next update comes a little sooner.
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From WalterKraken101 on March 01, 2008
Interesting update to the story. It appears that all the secrets will now perhaps be revealed.
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From ANON - Anon on February 29, 2008
great update... finally inuyasha is with kagome
& sango... but kagome's three friends are there too and cause some embarassing moments for everyone... they know about the feudal era and seems that inuyasha, kagome & sango got caught... how will they explain what was seen... update when you can... please and thank you...
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From Obsession1988 on February 28, 2008
Hey, sorry about not reviewing for a bit, I have been working my ass off lately.
Ok, you did a great job in ch 14 at adding some suspence. I probably never would have thought of the way that you had Sango go through the well, but it was a very logical explination. At first when I read ch 14 I thought that having both of InuYasha's kids be mad with him and then not allowing him to fallow his mates through the well was a little.... Mean. But you didn't make him suffer for too long so I have no complaints. You played out his stubrenness quite well by having him refuse to leave the bottom of the well until he could get to the other side. Having the Goshinboku come alive was also a siprise but it had the desired effect and wasn't really over the top.
I love how you have the end of ch 15 set up. Eri, Yuka, and Ayumi are all near the Goshinboku and InuYasha just saved Kagome which leaves him in plain sight for all to see without a hat. Also, how is Sango going to be able to show her concern for him with how he couldn't fallow through the well, if the trio thinks that she has a husband elsewere? Very interesting.
Can't wait to see what you have happen next.
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From SSJ04Mewtwo on February 25, 2008
Nice story. It's more original than most of the Inu/Kag stories here. This Mewtwo hopes to see the next chapter up soon.
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From WalterKraken101 on February 24, 2008
I love this story. Plenty of smut, yet there is a plotline in there to keep the story going. Keep up the good work.
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From ANON - Anon on February 23, 2008
great update... nice way of letting kagome and sango know about why inuyasha can't get through the well... so kagome and sango know why inuyasha can't come through the well... and sango seems to be adjusting fine in kagome's time with kagome's help... kinda funny how souta acts around sango... and sango met kagome's three friends... always asking too many questions... then when kagome went out looking for her necklace and with her in danger... it was the chance they were looking for and somehow inuyasha was able to get through the well and save kagome in time... interesting way of getting inuyasha back with them... what will kagome's three friends think though?... update when you can... please and thank you...
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From Coldstone on February 17, 2008
Ok. Now you got me.

I never expected that turn of the story.

Interesting idea, but I please make the time they stay separated not too long. ^^

I'm expecting the next chapter with impatience.
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From Obsession1988 on February 16, 2008
Ok, that was definatly an interesting way of explaining how the well works. Not the typical explination but somewhat logical. I must commend you though on doing a great job with InuYasha's reactions to having to get all of that food, and then not having them eat any. I can't wait to see were you take this story with the involvement of Rin as well. How would you explain one father and two mothers to a child? I also found it quite interesting how you played out the entire scene with them trying to get through the well. If you get into any Moe detailed descriptions as to why it works when they fell you could say that it was because they went down together or that it was there momentum. Saying that it was there momentum though would be more logical however, because InuYasha does not need to be with Kagome when he goes through so if the well is ever going to recognize Sango on the terms that you have set, she shouldn't need to be with Kagome. Now, I hope you take into consideration the fact that Sesshomaru does not know about the well, and you have him right next to it when Kagome and Sango fall in.
Keep up the good work.
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