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By : Xagzan

From Coldstone on February 14, 2008
Your Story is totally awesome.

I have a hunch, that Kagome and Sango will be very soon in Kagomes time...

Hell, it would be so much fun, if the whole group (including Seshy and Rin) would make the timeshift. ^^

Seshomaru in the future^. That would be so much fun, he he.

I'm eager to read more, since my tests are done and I have a month worth of freetime. Keep up your excellent work.

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From Vyper on February 14, 2008
Great story. I plan on reading more if you plan on writing more. :)
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From LadyCash on February 12, 2008
Oh yeah, he walked right into it!
Handled himself (and the girls) very well, though.
Steamy and hot like always.

Can't wait to see how you get Sango to Tokyo, but
have faith that it will unusual.

A concern, it's the new moon, IY's human night....
not so sure he'd be out in the open like that,
even with Naraku gone.
He might have gotten carried away, maybe, but to
sleep afterwards? Not so sure, Xag.
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From Obsession1988 on February 10, 2008
For once I really don't have much to say. You did a perfect job with the first threesome and it was a great length as well. But, I believe you should reread this chapter 'slowly' and fix a few grammatical errors. You left a couple of words out here and there and in the first little paragraph you put in an extra one.
Just trying to help. Please update soon, the anticipation of waiting to see which way you are going to take this story next is killing me!
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From ANON - Anon on February 10, 2008
great update... quite intense... will sango be able to pass through the well... wonder what happens next... update as soon as you can... please and thank you...
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From Obsession1988 on February 09, 2008
I wasn't sure if I should bring this up or not but.... Ah Hell with it! In ch5 when you added the part about blood bonding InuYasha first asks "Will you accept me claiming you as my mate? Accept me marking you as mine, and mine alone." Then you added "And, you know... if you do the same to me, it means that...(ect)" When InuYasha said if you do the same to me you were having him refer to 'marking.' What you had Kagome do, did not leave any type of 'mark' on InuYasha. So, to 'fix' this all you would have to do is replace "if you do the same to me" with something along the lines of "if you take in some of my blood." Although it could also be changed to have InuYasha just cut along his forarm or wrist and have her bite down there. But then you would have to docter up the part with Sango a bit. (please don't hate me for bringing this up)
I will commend you though on the fact that the way each took in InuYasha's blood did help with making each of them different in their love making as you did state you were trying to do (early on).
I have no actual complaints about what you've added I'm just a little anal retentive when it comes to detail. Anyway, I'm glad that I was able to help point something out for you, and I know that I have already stated this once but I will do so again. If you need any kind of help I'm always here.... I mean board. Contact me at obsession_1988@yahoo.com (I check it every day at 10:00PM unless I'm expecting something ~ or I try to anyways)
And just so you know I don't go around throwing my help everywhere (I just like the way you write and think that you could easily pull off some of my ideas)
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From Obsession1988 on February 09, 2008
This chapter certianly had me laughing for a while. You perfectly matched Shippo's personality to the one portrayed in the anime. I new from how you were carrying on with Shippo and Kaede's conversation that some ludicris question was going to be asked. However, his last question caught me completly off guard (I had to stop reading for a while so that I could catch my breath from laughing too hard). InuYasha's little escapade in this chapter was also quite halarious. I thought it was played out perfectly the way that InuYasha had to struggle with the new form of currency at the market, and the way he had to go through the store without even knowing what half of the items looked like. The one part of any fanfic that I tend to enjoy most are the scenes that involve interaction between the trio of Eri, Yuka, and Ayumi, with either Kagome, InuYasha, or both. The way that this little group pries for information on any numer of subjects is just too damn funny. Again, everyone's personality was perfect, right down to how nervous InuYasha became after the strawberries were found (by the way, that was a great way to give that trio the assumption that something else is going on). I hope you plan on having at least one more scene with them (and I have a nice idea for that). I'm also looking forward to the next chapter because of the imposed theesome (just remember longer the better).
Ok, now for the part were I have to empty my overactive mind of all the senarios that I have thought up because of this story. I love the mention of trying to get Sango threw the well even though you hint at it not being possible. The one thing that I noticed about this fic is that you did not make use of the blood bond (where the female has to mark the male as well and take in some of their blood). I'm not sure if you ment to do this, but the way that you have everything set up right now leads one to assume that Kagome and Sango will still age as normal humans and die before InuYasha has even reached the half way point in his life span. If you were to edit the two chapters that contain the first time kagome and Sango make love to InuYasha, and incorperate the blood bond, this would mean that their souls have become bound together. This in turn would make them more alike and possibly make the well unable to diferentiate between the two, making it possible for Sango to pass.
(if you do the above) When Sango finally gets through the well you could have Eri, Yuka, and Ayumi drop by to check up on Kagome, only to have them find InuYasha lounging with "two" pregnant wemon giving rise to the belief that the other was the one InuYasha was two timing on Kagome with.
While InuYasha, Kagome, and Sango are on the other side of the well, Miroku could come back to try and make ammens with Sango. During his stay Shippo being the oblivious kitsune that he is would attempt to ask him why InuYasha impregnated "both" Kagome and Sango. Then (if you even go this route) you could have Miroku errupt in blind rage and when Sango comes back through the well he attempts to place a sutra on her belly in an attempt to purify the pup resulting in an enraged hanyou beating him sensless and tossing him out of the village under the threat of death if he ever returns (yes, I'm not a huge fan of Miroku either but I don't exactaly hate him).
All right, now I can sleep without my mind constantly bombarding me with new ideas. I hope some of this helps you to be able to write more, and in the meantime I'll be waiting for the next update.
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From LadyCash on February 09, 2008
This had me laughing most all the way through.
Poor InuYasha, having to handle not only two pregnant women and their weird cravings,
but to face the modern era to soothe them. Piling on the frieds was a cruel, but
hilarious touch.

I'd love to read more of IY in Tokyo. Much room there for mayhem, methinks.

Very nice lemon, but I think IY is about to walk right in over his head!
Yep, should be good! I feel sorry for him, yet want you to continue.
Hmmm, what does that say about me???
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From weyrdkat on February 06, 2008
Xag,

Mmm . . .much better. I really liked that you had him go talk to 'Gome's mom. That's really mature of him and it makes him seem more ready for children. We get a three-way in the next chappy? 'Cause that would just be whipped deliciousness.

:) Yum.
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From Obsession1988 on February 03, 2008
Again, nice job with the realism. Most people would have just had InuYasha jump kagome after her declaration of wanting to become pregnant. Personally, I wasn't really expecting you to incorperate Mrs. Higurashi into the story the way you did. I immagined that you would most likely have her find out through seeing Kagome start to show. However, this approach gives InuYasha a more mature image (wanting to get the mother's blessing before hand), and you were able to bring up some of his concerns relating back to his past as a hanyou. I really did enjoy reading the excerpt involving Mrs. Higurashi and InuYasha. Though she isn't a very well defined character within the anime series, from what is shown of her personality, you pretty much summed up what her reaction would be like. Also, nice job at showing Kagome's enthusiasm in finally getting a yes from InuYasha, and switching up her personality a little bit to become more dominating (as though the initial shyness has worn off and she's become bolder). I am very happy by the way to hear that this will not actually be the last chapter in this fanfic (there is still quite a lot you can do). Therefore, I will be waiting (somewhat impatiently) for the next update.
[Damn good story]
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From ANON - Anon on February 03, 2008
great update... nice of inuyasha to tell kagome's mom... really sweet of inuyasha to ask kagome how she feels about everything... hope kagome does get pregnant... it'll be quite funny how inuyasha will deal with two pregnant women... will miroku come back to visit them... wonder what happens next... update as soon as you can... please and thank you...
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From Obsession1988 on February 01, 2008
Another great chapter in the bag, though I am sad to hear you say that there will only be one more chapter. I really liked how you put together the different chain of thoughts between InuYasha and Kagome. I believe that what you put down for InuYasha's reaction was absolutly perfect; happy with a little bit of uneasesiness because of Kagome's reaction. Also, the way that you had Kagome come to the realization of the fact that she too wanted a child (a lot sooner than previously expected) was a very ralistic thought process.
Because the next chapter is going to be the last, there are just two things that I would really like for you to do. 1: make this the longest chapter you have written thus far.(in the winter I pretty much have no life outside of work and sleep, so in my free time I look up fanfiction for hours and I would rather use my time reading "good" fanfics. You actually know how to write.) 2: have Mrs. Higurashi's reaction to Kagome becoming pregnant.
Again, great job and please update soon.
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From weyrdkat on January 31, 2008
Sorry it made you so hungry. . .I watch too much food network. But your story has been delicious! I'm hoping that with a chapter title like equilibrium, you're gonna ballance the scales in terms of lemons. . .poor Kagome has been neglected. It almost feels as if she's a third wheel at some points rather than the initiator of the relationships. I did like the differentiation between the two pairs though. . .although I think Kagome is stronger than that. Oh well. . .the story is good anyway.
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From ANON - Anon on January 30, 2008
great update... as expected of kagome... since it's in her character to be happy for the ones she loves... and glad that she's finally made a decision on what she wants with her life with inuyasha & sango... wonder what inuyasha & sango will say... how will they react... update as soon as you can... looking forward to the last chapter... please and thank you...
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From ANON - Anon on January 27, 2008
great update... kagome's news was good but sango's seemed better... not surprised that she'd be pregnant first since inuyasha & sango spent more time together that inuyasha & kagome... how will inuyasha & kagome react?... what will kagome do now... will inuyasha spend more time and pay attention to sango more now that she's pregnant... how will kagome feel... wonder what happens next... update as soon as you can... please and thank you...
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