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Reviews for Unexpected Acceptance

By : nellichan
  • From weyrdkat on November 14, 2011
    You might want to reformat your story and try to post again. It's one giant paragraph and I didn't get past the first line because it all blurred making it too difficult to read.

    Kat
    weyrdkat@msn.com
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  • From ShadowStar666 on February 13, 2008
    that was really quite a sweet little fic. ^_^ very cool.
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  • From ShouraiChan on February 10, 2008
    Awwwww! Cute ending! We totally love you too, Nellichan!!!!!!!!!! Great story!!!

    ~Sho-Chan~
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  • From Martinsfor3 on January 30, 2008
    This is nellichan's friend. No, this story is not finished yet! She just moved and she's getting internet on Monday so she can update and appease all of her adoring fans. I read the rest of the story and it's reaaaaally good so you better stop back and check out the rest! You WON'T be disappointed! Satisfaction guaranteed, or your money back! 'nite.
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  • From LadyCash on January 27, 2008
    Oh you are cruel to leave us there!
    So close, yet so far....

    Something I noticed, you went from him kissing her neck to cunnilingus without any
    warning, so it took me a moment to figure out if he was at her nipples or further down.
    Might want to clear that up, show him working his way down her body....slowly....LOL.

    Moving, hmmm? Hope it's quick and painless, and you come back to this soon.
    I'd love to read more of your work!
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  • From on January 27, 2008
    whoot! Very nice 1st story. I'm enjoying it totally~ Can't wait for more :)
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  • From ShouraiChan on January 27, 2008
    *DIES AGAIN* BAD! BAD YOU! *hits you with rolled up newspaper* Lol, j/k! I LOVE this story so much! Definitely one of my faves!!!!
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  • From ShouraiChan on January 26, 2008
    NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!! CLIFFIE!!!!!!!!!!

    *Goes into cardiac arrest*

    Sho-Chan's mom: "Dear! She's reading pervy stories and one has killed her!"
    Sho-Chan's dad: "Honey, she's just gone into shock."

    *Medics rush in*

    "CLEAR!"

    *Shocks sho-chan*

    "CLEAR!"

    *Shocks again*

    "ORDER ME A PIZZA!"

    *Orders pizza*

    "CLEAR!"

    *Is brought back to life* HURRAY!!!!!!!!!! Lol, loved the story as USUAL! Damn those cliffies!

    "CLEAR!"

    *Gets shocked again*

    "HEY!!!!!"

    "Sorry..."

    *Medics leave...with pizza*

    If you don't want me to be shocked again, please post! Lol, much love!!!!!
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  • From LadyCash on January 26, 2008
    Nice chapter, the pre-lemon teasing.
    You're on the ball, having this all ready to
    go! Will be happily looking for the rest.

    Do you have your next story lined up?
    Ideas? Partly written?
    Because you know, after this, you have to
    keep writing, right! We demand it, we must
    have more.

    Hope you're having a great weekend!
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  • From Patty530 on January 25, 2008
    Very Good. Nice buildup. Please continue.

    Luv;
    Patty
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  • From ShouraiChan on January 25, 2008
    (Sorry, stupid comp!!!) Anyway, I LOVE this story!!!
    Please keep up the great work!


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  • From ShouraiChan on January 25, 2008
    Nelli-Chaaaaaaaan!!!!! I less than three this story!!!! (
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  • From LadyCash on January 25, 2008
    You're doing a great job with this!
    Good characterization, excellent pacing.

    Glad you didn't have them rush into the
    lemon. A long, slow buildup is best, and
    much more realistic, esp the first time.

    Good to show them both as nervous, and
    slightly hesitant. Very true to life there,
    for first-timers. Again, great job!
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  • From bookworm810 on January 24, 2008
    This is really getting good. I can't wait for the next chapter. And sorry I can't think of anything more meaningful to say about this story, but it's late here and I'm getting tired, so in conclusion I'll just say that I'm eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
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  • From L0VER on January 23, 2008
    i love it, nice and simple. great work! inu's sucha cutie. update soon!
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