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Reviews for Heir to the West

By : Narniafreek07
  • From snowbird on July 11, 2008
    Here I am again. I forgot to add that I agree with your other reviewer, chevonne. They should not fall in love right away. True, binding love takes time which will involve emotions and tension between them as they get to know and discover each other. Also, I agree with chevonne about keeping Kagome a human but with a long lifespan. I just can't see her as a demoness or hanyou. She can be strong with her miko powers. I want to put in another reminder about legalmyth's suggestion about their pup/pups needing him near every so often to feed off his youki while they're in her womb. That to me sounds so sweet. ahhhhhhh!
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  • From snowbird on July 11, 2008
    Thank you for using my words and giving me credit. I got a big delight and laugh at how you used them. I'm glad he's bonding with her right from the start. It seems he's going all out to keep her with him permanently. I know she's innocent, but good grief! Refusing his gifts? Avoiding him? I think she's letting her girlish nerves rattle her too easily. The reason she gave for returning his gifts was not valid. She is going to be his mate after all. It's his right to give her gifts, especially as part of the courting ritual. It's good he's so understanding. Otherwise he could have taken it completely the wrong way by her foolish actions. At least she didn't refuse or avoid his kiss. Now that was hot!
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  • From scarletwitchextreme on July 11, 2008
    eeeppp, love the story, sigh, poor kagome, and well i cant wait to see what is going to happen, and I cant help but believe sesshoumaru is enjoying tomenting the miko a little to much. sigh. she always gets herself into these kinds of mess. Love the story, so keep up the good work and keep the updates coming.
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  • From rini on July 10, 2008
    I like the story so far though i had just one thought the part where sesshomaru says “In this society it is a mothers place to be with the groom’s parents. Not with the bride and helping her decisions.” you could of had Kagome remind him that he doesn't have parents and that she spent her time with his only family before, so there isn't any point for her to be there.

    just a thought i had.
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  • From monrque on July 10, 2008
    there enough conflict in the story you don't need any more
    think about it.
    1 the relationship between sess and kags. they won't just fall in love with each other right off the bat.
    2 how the court will act towards the union.(jilted lovers) (lust driven men)
    3 there is always war they did fight alot back then.
    My question is why would he have to give up his land in the
    first place if he didn't find a mate.
    Is there another fight between good and evil (what will make the heir so loved)
    and is kagome's life span going to be the same a sesshomaru's.
    I like her to stay human tho. just have the strength of all
    the miko's before her. (she would live almost forever)

    very nice story you have here and i am looking forward to
    reading more of it.

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  • From Tricia1224 on July 09, 2008
    Lye (soap) it should be either lay or lie. That is the only comment I have about grammar or spelling. Now ideas for conflict: InuYasha confronting Kagome and kagome confronting him about Kikyo. OC steals Kagome. When kagome goes home, she runs into a demon problem, while she is trying to get Rin's dress made, and she unexpectedly gets help from her daughter.
    Great story so far. I hope you have a great day.
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  • From InnocentLittleFlower on July 09, 2008
    great chapter. sorry to hear about your dad. caint wait for more!
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  • From Archfiend on July 09, 2008
    nice chapter, oh my that castle has a lot coming towards them,I bet Kagome will turn everything upside down,due to her being from a different age,making Sesshoumaru wonder what he`s got himself into now.On the other hand I wonder how long it takes for sesshoumaru to notice how much he likes her. Continue please.
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  • From sugar0o on July 09, 2008
    lovely story, as for conflicts, there are mother in laws, half-siblings, and jealous demoness' that you could always run away with. ^_^ possible a left over 'child' of Naraku as well.
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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on July 06, 2008
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From MysteriousGirlYashie on July 06, 2008
    i haven't seen the movie you stated but the fic is Awesome! so um is sesshoumaru going to be sleeping with two woman like in that movie?


    Yashie~
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  • From SmoothSecret on July 06, 2008
    Wow!! This really is a good story! The plot is really good and is really...how should I put this...entertaining?...Yeah, I think that's it! ^^ I can't wait for the next chapter!!!
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  • From missy71 on June 29, 2008
    Well that was another good chapter, you really have me into this fic. I can't wait to see what happens next.
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  • From snowbird on June 28, 2008
    I LOVE IT!!! hahaha. The womb screams no more! You used it! Of course, you could have already had that in mind and I just jumped the gun with the suggestion. I had a big laugh over it. I wish I could have seen her face as she was thinking all those thoughts as the reality of it all came crashing into her mind. It's good that she wants to retain her independence but she still needs to take into consideration youkai mating rituals and laws. They both need to do some compromising. I have to be on his side, though, about the bite mark on the wrist. To me that was the same as a human male giving her an engagement ring. She needs to realize this. She should not have blown up at him. She needs to apologize to him. Since she's going to be the mate to a youkai, she needs to learn everything about their culture. That's just like in today's world, if you marry someone from a foreign country, it's best you learn all you can about their culture before you say "I do". It will save a lot of problems later.
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  • From InnocentLittleFlower on June 28, 2008
    i could just see it Kagome goes to say good by miroku goes to give her one last hug and hand shake and sesshomarus hair stands on end eyes go red yelling "NO TOUCHY!!" lol wow kinda reminds me of the episode of when miroku first came in but insted it was inu yasha yelling all the no touchys. Either way still great job keep it going i cheek every day for updates.
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