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By : jessimaxwell

From FluffyGreenDryad on April 30, 2009
Er...run Kouga?

Once again I can hear Inuyasha's thoughts:

"Kami, do I hafta do everything around here!? I need a freakin' break. Hell, can I even leave to get the damn heart? Everytime I go somewhere someone gets hurt! Seriously! How'd I get to be the strongest?! Ha! Can't leave for a minute. Too bad I couldn't use Ryuukotsusei's...he was a dragon right? Unfortunately it'll be all mush by now 'cause I killed him ages ago. Damnit. First thing, smooth shit over about Kouga...then the heart and hope everyone stays in one fucking piece until I get back *twitch*...Get Sairx healed and Miroku happy...then that paper work and the meeting...and find out what the fuck is going on with how the old man got hurt. Crap, when's the next New Moon anyways? And where the fuck is Myoga...wait, right, it's dangerous here. Besides, might be better if dad DIDN'T talk to Myoga and learn about all that's been goin' on while he was away. Geeze, I need a frigging bath too. But the family and now the wolf tribes are always hogging the frigging spring!Bastards."

As for a beta, I think you do a good job of catching your mistakes. Personally, I should get one as I can't spell and my grammer is worse than Inuyasha's. But, if you do get a beta, it will be longer between your updates because you'll have to wait for them to finish before you post. It can be hard to find a good beta with the same schedual as yourself.

As always, I'm looking forward to the next part!
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From ladykaa28 on April 30, 2009
I guess I'm not ready for him to settle down with anyone yet because there is far too many things left up in the air for him to be settled down enough to think. The more you write the you bring out problems that each one has. Rin has not gotten over her death by the wolf clan, Sesshoumaru can't get past the nightmares, Tai can never be a beta nor can Sesshoumaru so that won't work. The only person that has lived a life full of nothing but heartache and strife is the best one to help everyone. Inuyasha can teach Rin how to be brave because he had no one there for him. Show Sesshoumaru how overcome that which can not be changed, but to adapt and get stronger inspite of the circumstance. (ie he is a hanyou and just as strong if not stronger than most full-blooded demons.) And Tai could learn the same lesson as Sess about Inuyasha's strength to beat the odds. Show him that he may have spend more time with Sesshoumaru he also needs time to heal. It's like just because he has had a longer time to deal with his problems, that he doesn't need to heal. What they all can show him is that he is no longer alone. He now has what he has spent his whole life looking for. He may not have a mother, but Rin can fulfill the job as a younger sister to him, a daughter to Sess and the love of life and all things beautiful from both of Tai's mates. Thats what I'm getting from you so far. None of them are ready to take to next step just yet. As for the kissing between Tai and Sess, Sess is just reacting to someone he knows loves. With Inuyasha, he has always been honest about what he would do to Sess. If he meant hard then they fought if he meant to take care of then they talked and would do what ever to make sure that Sesshoumaru was alright.

As far as you proofing your own work you do a very good job. Little error here nd ther, but nothing that would warrent extra work.
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From Vyper on April 30, 2009
Poor Rin, I hope that she will get over her fear of Kouga. Kouga really is a sweetie pie underneith that tough exterior. I also hope that Sesshoumaru doesn't kill him or his pack.
I also think that Tashio being honest with Sesshoumaru is good, but I also feel like Sesshoumaru also has an attraction for Inuyasha. He seemed very pleased when Inuyasha complimented him and showed him affection.
However, I also think Sesshoumaru is already having a hard enough time dealing with his rape and abuse so I think it will take time for him to heal before he can just jump into a relationship with anyone. I think between Tashio, Rin, Sairex, Miroku, Kouga, and Inuyasha they will get Sesshoumaru back to his old self again.
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From FluffyGreenDryad on April 29, 2009
Lol, I think I would fear more of Sesshoumaru's gardening skills ^.^ I loved the pepsi scene in the last chapter, it was very cute.

I wonder how Sesshoumaru and Rin will react to having Kouga and his pack around? considering he was responsible for her first death. Bah, she's probably already forgiven him.
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From Vyper on April 29, 2009
I love Sairex and Miroku's conversations with one another. They are so damn cute together. I am also glad it was Kouga who Inuyasha got and the inuendos were terrific. I still say that Inuyasha should be with Sesshoumaru too, but that is my opinion. Kouga is a good influence, but Inuyasha and Kouga as cute as they would be as lovers are too much alike. In fact I always thought those two should have been brothers. They are too funny together. Anyway kudos and all that since I love your story. I will keep reading as you keep on a writing.
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From ladykaa28 on April 29, 2009
Yay some of the old Sesshoumaru came out with the plant trying to "kill" him. They new guards, new plants for the gardens, a healing lord and mending advisor. Now maybe they can catch a little break or not...
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From LovelyDiesel on April 29, 2009
Uh oh!Oh nooooooo! Hope Inu no Taisho's ok. i just love sairex i wish i could draw. hope someone does for you. Hey Enter Sango?? ooooh i love your story i get off of work around 1am est and stay up till day light so most nights i get your post. Beeb following since the 1st chap so about time my lazy buns reviewed. Keep up the good drama hun!!
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From Vyper on April 28, 2009
Awesome chapter so far. Too bad that Tashio was injured. I think it is time Inuyasha kicked a little demon ass.
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From ladykaa28 on April 28, 2009
It was onething to hurt Sesshoumaru, but it was a whole other thing to hurt their father. I have forgotten about the guy that Sesshoumaru had clawed in the circle. Now it all makes sense as to who would spead rumors about him. I'm guessing that Inuyasha will being bringing Kagome back and if not then maybe Kouga. I kinda like Sesshoumaru with the new attitude about being open. The more time he spends with the others one on one, the more he seems to be coming back out of his shell.
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From FluffyGreenDryad on April 27, 2009
Awww, I'm glad Rin's back to help Sesshoumaru perk up again. Though, I'm a little nervous to see how he racts to all that sugar O.o; it could be dangerous to those around him.
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From Vyper on April 27, 2009
I hope Sairex gets better. Poor guy, beat up by his own poison. I also hope that things will work out with whomever Sesshoumaru ends up with. I still think he would be best with Inuyasha, but this ins't my story. Inuyasha is amusing and I just think honestly he and Rin in a M/M story is like a no. I would like to see Inuyasha with Sesshoumaru, but if he ends up with Tashio so be it. He looks up to his Father, but fact is........well it is his Father. He like gave helped concieve him with the same sperm that he wants to use in other ways with his son, changed his diapers, that kind of thing. Being a Mom I know I would beat the living hell out of my husband if he did anything to my son like this. I am kind of waiting for Mom Inu to do so. Believe me Mom's can be pretty mean especially when it comes to their little ones no matter how old they are.
I can see her now "WHAT THE HELL DO YOU THINK YOU ARE DOING!", "Nothing that should concern.........", "THAT IS MY SON! YOU DIDN'T GO THROUGH NINE MONTHS OF CARRYING HIM IN YOUR WOMB WITH SEVEN HOURS OF LABOR ON TOP OF THAT FACT! GET YOUR DAMN HANDS OFF OF HIM BEFORE I CUT THEM OFF!" "But Mom............." "DON'T YOU BUT MOM ME SESSHOUMARU TASHIO! I GAVE BIRTH TO YOU! I CAN PUT YOU RIGHT BACK TOO!" "Mom that is so gross........." "DON'T YOU TALK BACK TO ME! (TAKES HIM OVER HER KNEE AND SPANKS THE HELL OUT OF HIM WHILE HE CRIES LIKE A BABY)" "Woman don't you tell me how I should raise my son........" "YOU CALL THAT RAISING HIM? I SHOULD HAVE YOU ARRESTED IF I DON'T KILL YOU FIRST YOU CHEATING PERVERTED BASTARD!" Anyway, it would end up with Tashio being beaten to death with some kind of kitchen object and since he doesn't hit women he would be totally screwed. Sesshoumaru would have to live with Mom because she knows what is best for him and Inuyasha would be brought to her house by force since he is too young to make decisions for himself since Stepmom also has a say so in his life. Rin, well she would be spoiled rotton, would not have done a damn thing wrong ever in Mommy Inu's eyes, and Sesshoumaru would be told he cannot be a Father to her because he is a bad influence plus he has to go through family counciling since his Father is considered a Pedophile since Sesshoumaru is at least 700 years younger then him plus he is apparently still a child to his Mom. So there it is.
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From ladykaa28 on April 27, 2009
Ok I have my little two cents to put in. Here's the break down on who needs to be with Sesshoumaru right now. No this is not a coupling request. Rin and Tai are good for him, but not as good as Inuyasha. Rin will see that all he does is good no matter how he might "go all demon" she will still say its good. Tai has been babying him. Not that it's a bad thing because after everything he has been through he needs it. But Sesshoumaru doesn't want to be a disappointment to him. He already feels bad about "being a disgrace" to the family name. Inuyasha is the best person to spend most of his time with. Inuyasha wants to bond with him as brothers and it will allow Sesshoumaru to be himself or to explore who he really is. With Inuyasha he doesn't feel as if he has to prove himself. He will easily lose control when it comes to Inuyasha without him (yasha) even trying. He needs someone that will change from time to time to break him out of his self loathing.
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From ladykaa28 on April 26, 2009
I can see both being shocked, but what will Inuyasha think about Sess kissing their dad? He was confused about his feelings for him, but seeing him kiss someone else well.....
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From Vyper on April 26, 2009
Poor Rin, in for the shock of her life. Poor Inuyasha. There goes his heart. I still do hope that there is room for Inuyasha in all of this. Poor Sairex. He is injured and poor Miroku since he loves Sairex so damn much he would die without him. Love the chapters so far.
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From FluffyGreenDryad on April 25, 2009
Oddly...I was eating a bowl of yummy mint chocolate ice cream (Hagen Dase...so tastey...so expensive x.x! good thing I only have ice cream about once every two months) as I read this chapter, lol. Keep going whereever the story takes you, it's all any writer can do. I'm looking forward to Rin's handeling of the Great Dog General and hopefully he can talk some sense into his son. I do think Sesshoumaru needs Rin around to bring out his soft side.

Eager as always for the next part
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