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Reviews for Legal Justification

By : Polymer
  • From RogueMudblood on May 12, 2012

    I was very intrigued by the scenario - Kagome working for Sesshoumaru in a law firm could only lead to trouble. Where you started to lose me was directly after Byakuya's case is handed off to Inuyasha, and Sesshoumaru reprimands Kagome. We're never told that Kagome and Sesshoumaru are alone in the room. So at first, I was wondering why she would reveal such personal details in front of both a client and her former paramour. I came to the conclusion that you intended for the others to have left Sesshoumaru's office while Kagome's mind was abuzz with reminiscence. I would suggest a little statement, as she is coming back to herself, that the two are now alone in the office.

    As far as PWP, you did fairly well, though a little warning about the urination wouldn't have been amiss. I wasn't expecting that, and it's a squicky point.

    I have to admit, from your summary, I was expecting a bit more plot - several chapters at least. Should you choose to come back to this piece, I'd be interested to see if the liaison between Sesshoumaru and Kagome continues. Equally intriguing would be Inuyasha's reaction, given their history in the universe you've created.

    Happy writing!
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