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Reviews for Where He Belongs

By : AikawaAkihiko
  • From ANON - Franrie on September 09, 2015
    I think I have read this story about 3 times over the years and I keep coming back to it. I absolutely love it! Love the way you write; the interactions between the characters; the romance; the way you built the wolves' society; even love your OC's. I am sad that the Omega died, and so tragically and senseless. He was such a cutie :(
    Choshi-baba was great! And such a closet pervert it's delightful. The old lady had to get her kicks somehow lol
    Anyway, thank you so much for sharing this story with us. I know i will be rereading it again in the future for sure. I love finding new things in it with every read :D hugs
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  • From ANON - Moon on September 30, 2013
    I completely agree with the poster "Yahnkehy" above. I figured that you lost interest in your story and rushed to finish it. As you keep up your writings try not to do this. Your readers are happier to wait on a story than to be given something rushed and poorly written. Also, mature readers are not reading for just the romance and sex scenes. I was reading for the plot above all things. Try to find beta readers who have top level grammar skills and can actually do the work. This will only improve your writing, I promise you. It would be nice to see you do a revision of this to sort out plot holes, incorrect words and grammar, and to expand on parts that were incomplete. But because this is fanfiction it is a good way to practice.
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  • From ANON - Yahnkehy on May 06, 2013
    I realize that this story is well over two years old and that it's marked 'complete'--even though there is far too much left unresolved for it to even be half over yet--but I'd like to humbly offer some advice. Whether you accept it or not is your choice.

    When you sign on with a beta reader, ask them to mark their corrections in a different color so that you can see the changes made and can confirm that they did actually beta read the chapter. I say that because there are still a multitude of errors--grammatical, spelling, punctuation and continuity--in the chapters that had been "beta read". Ruff(to point out one that made me frown in confusion) doesn't mean "not smooth" it's the frill of hair on the back of an animal's neck, right below their skull. Rough, however, *does* mean 'not smooth'. Confirming the corrections a beta has made is key to correcting the mistakes in your own writing so that you don't keep making the same mistakes.

    Youki is the power the demons wield. Youkai is what the demons *are*. His youkai couldn't be upset, because he *is* the youkai and they don't see halves of themselves, the same way we can't sit back and see dad's half, or mom's half. It's just us, no parts or pieces that have more control than another. However, his *youki* can be upset, since it's the primal power throbbing inside the youkai. It can react on an instinctual level to outside stimulus, the same way you can get a bad feeling about something, just a little more intense.

    The story line is adorable. It's cute and a little campy in places, but an adorable little story. I'm just trying to figure out who the characters are. Inuyasha, while he might be insecure about his place in the world due to the trials he's faced, isn't the kind of character who would simply go "Oh, so because this asshat (who I've never even spoken to before) suggests that I leave, I should just walk out without a word or backward glance." He'd more than likely have joined in with the fight and jeered at the idiots who were *rebelling* against their alpha and signing their own death warrants. To cross the alpha means death, because if the alpha can't trust his underlings to follow orders then that is a weakness that could cause the entire pack harm. If you can't trust your guards to support your orders (even if they don't agree), then why the hell are you putting your trust in them to defend your babies? Koga was a weakling to allow even the slightest sniff of dissent, and Inuyasha isn't quite so simpleminded as he was here. He's seen enough evil and manipulation to catch onto it a bit faster than the layperson.

    Anyway, cute story. You still need it beta read, of course, and to write an actual ending. I look forward to seeing how your skill as a writer grows and changes as you do. Best wishes! Yahnkehy
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  • From ANON - blu kat on February 17, 2013
    Oh man, I forgot about this story. I'm glad that I found it again because it was great. Love that everything work out for them. Thanks for the read.
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  • From ANON - Confused Reader on November 03, 2012
    Is that all? Aren't you going to write about Inuyasha giving birth? Really not a good place to end unless you are planning a sequel.
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  • From ANON - rachelleryan on September 18, 2012
    So happy you finished! As an author perpetually writing wips I sympathize completely with the frustration of leaving things unfinished. And I agree I wasn't reading this fic for the fight scenes, choking the psychotic old fart did it for me. Thank you for your hard work.
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  • From ANON - Amelie on August 09, 2012
    I really liked it, but I think it ended too soon. I wanted to see the new pups.
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  • From NAnderson on July 22, 2012
    Wow, when I saw this story was complete I had to go back and read the whole thing before finishing it up. This truly was a wonderful story that I am saddened to see end. I can't help but feel that there is more to tell... like in a sequel perhaps ;)? well either way it was an amazing read that I deeply enjoyed
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  • From savannah19742001 on July 19, 2012
    Okay loved it but how many pups did InuYasha have? That is one of the burning questions I have and what the little one(s) look like...
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  • From RoseWolf on July 13, 2012
    Thats IT?! inuyasha hasnt even had his pups yet! YOU CANT END IT! AHHH lol
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  • From ANON - kerbear on July 08, 2012
    More please!! what happens next
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  • From ANON - emma on July 07, 2012
    uumm... tell me this is not it!! I been waiting forever and did not expect it to end like that.. I wanted to read about the battle to get the kids back about Inuyasha having his cubs..so sad that it just cuts off like that.
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  • From ANON - addiena saffir on July 07, 2012
    wah i didn't want it to end. I hope an epilogue will follow to let us know how the birth went and how everyone is doing.
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  • From jdbbrz27 on July 07, 2012
    Can't say that I'm not a bit disappointed I mean Inuyasha hadn't even had his puppies yet if your going to tease with Mpreg you really should go all the way I mean otherwise it's just cruel. I bet you thought I wasn't reading anymore huh I was I just wasn't able to review because of computer problems. Not to bad for your first story I hope you keep writing more. Can't review to much still having those probs but continue writing you're pretty good at it.
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  • From RukiRomance on July 07, 2012
    WHAT!? THE END!?

    You have got to write another story! Part two!? I really want to see Kouga's and InuYasha's pups look like and what they are! OOOOHHH you just had to stop the story!!

    I still loved it tho... :)

    Thank you for an amazing story!

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