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Reviews for My Rival's Brother

By : Neptunesdemon

From ANON - yohanita21 on July 07, 2014
First thing's first... I am so excited you updated, and added a new chapter!!! I'm a huge fan of your story, and now is really getting interesting! I hope Sesshomaru confronts his father, and lets him know that he won't be marrying anyone, and that he's not breaking things up with Kouga! In regards to the male pregnancy, my opinion is that it really doesn't fit the story. I want Sesshomaru to come clean about his relationship with Kouga for the right reasons, not because he's pregnant and now he has no choice BUT to come clean. I want it to be his decision, solely because he loves Kouga and can't imagine marrying someone else, instead of being forced into an union with Kouga because is the right thing to do. That's just my opinion, but I'll probably be ok with which ever direction you decide to take, as long as you continue writing amazing stuff. Please update soon! Your story is one of the main reasons why I check this site periodically! Please, please, please update soon!! This is some awesome writing and I can't get enough!
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From ANON - MEMORIETRAIL1 on July 06, 2014
Oh i hope it dose not end more please

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From ANON - Tee on July 06, 2014
The thing that I love about Sesshomaru is that he has a backbone and when he doesn't agree with what you have to say he says so but when it comes to his father he needs to grow a pare before he losses what is most important to him. Kouga is the best thing to happen to him and he's going to give it up because his father says so well FUCK HIM! And when is Sesshomaru getting knocked up cause that is when the fun really begins. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE STOP LETTING SESSY BEING A DUMBASS BY BEING ASHAMED OF WHO HE REALLY IS!!!!!!!!!! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UP-DATE ASAP!!!!!!!!!
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From GodOfInsanity on July 06, 2014
Dun, dun, dun! And now, the plot thickens! I had a feeling Touga would make his move eventually. I feel bad for Sesshoumaru. He gets the iron fist, probably all of his life, and InuYasha gets to mess around and act like a moron pretty much his entire life. It isn't rare for the heir (oldest son) to get this sort of treatment while the younger is pretty much�ignored, for the most part. Touga wasn't really that wise to spoil and allow InuYasha to have free reign. He may think he can control InuYasha later, but what I see is InuYasha is gonna rebel and run off. But that's not the point of this story right now.

Hm�I don't know, but I feel like Sesshoumaru may snap sometime soon. He reminds me of a strong, yet lithe rope being pulled from each end slowly, yet continuously until at some point, the intense, stressful pressure makes the rope give and it snaps. In other words, he's like an abused dog that gets beat and kicked around until one day that dog has had it with its master and it attacks said master. When it comes to something Sesshoumaru really wants, I see him fighting for it.

If you are not sure where to go from here, you can always message me and I can help. Sometimes it helps to brainstorm with others, especially if they're good at coming up with ideas. Which, I am, by the way. So, if you really need some ideas, feel free to e-mail me. If not, then I can't wait until your next chapter. You're doing a fan-freaking-tastic job, by the way.
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From kougaslover on July 05, 2014
I have to say I'm sorry I missed this story for so long as it is spectacular. I love how well you've written Kouga topping Sesshomaru, the characterization is perfect and the action so very hot. It is so believable as well, Sesshomaru is perfectly in character, he is in control of his emotions and strong and alpha...and in the bedroom he likes to be dominated by a certain ookami. All in all a phenomenally well written yaoi!

If there is any critique I could give, it has to rest in the last chapter. Inutaisho seems to be the only character in this whose characterization seems off. He's painfully cold in this fic, the last chapter specifically, which just doesn't seem right. He knowingly sacrificed himself to save his human mate and hanyou son, choosing love over power and prestige and dominance. He chose to die for his love to live, gave his life for a son most others saw as a disgrace. Him trying to force Sesshomaru to abandon his own love for an arranged marriage just seems wrong to me.

That aside though, I love this fic, and can't wait for the next chapter!
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From ANON - Inuhime on July 04, 2014
I think this is getting good now. Idk if you finally decided on Mprg or not, but if Sesshy got preg. or if he for some reason decided to switch the tables on Kouga and he got pregnant. Then Inu-papa would have to accept it XD" From the sound of it Inupapa might be one of those 'i just want grandkids' types.. XD""... Either that or he don't like his oldest son being the one on bottom, which I do agree with. XD"
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From whitetiger on June 06, 2014
This chapter was worth the wait. I think you did a good job getting back into the swing of the story.
Thank you for the upload.
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From MatushkaRossiya on May 19, 2014
Okay, I've seen a little discussion in the comments, concerning mpreg:
Well, I for myself would love to see the drama and angst caused by this. It would energise the whole story and I think it would become even more interesting.
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From MatushkaRossiya on May 19, 2014
Oh my god. You don't know how happy I was, when I saw the update ;u;
Personally, I'm really curious now, if daddy will ever find out about them both. And if yes, I'm just even more curious about his reaction.
(sorry, for my lousy english)
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From ANON - mo on May 16, 2014
No male preg please. Althrough i like a good male preg situation every once and awile it wouldnt fit this story
Thanks for the update
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From GodOfInsanity on May 14, 2014
I must confess, I was delighted to see an update for this. I will admit quite often I checked this website mostly to see if you had updated. ;)

I, too, adore a SessUKE/Bottom character, and I don't really feel that your Sesshoumaru, in both of your SesshUKE stories, is very much out of character. In the InuYasha series, it was never said what Sesshoumaru's sexuality was (if he even has one) or his top/bottom preference. That's the great thing about a lot of books/shows; they tend to leave stuff wide open for us to conclude on our own. I love that your Sesshoumaru still walks around all Alpha like, but in the bedroom, he prefers to be manhandled. He's not too submissive, like a girl or girly boy, which is great. He's a strong demon the willingly hands over the power to another because this is something he desires, and I love that. Weaker people being dominated really is quite boring and overdone, so something like this is quite refreshing.

Not to mention you also write really well, so that's a plus. All the characters seem as In Character as you can make them, so we all appreciate that. Good job!

As for the Mpreg, normally I don't push it, but I really think that it would make a lot of sense with this story. Touga is already onto Kouga (at least to me it seems that way and well, just imagine if he finds out his first born son got knocked up. Hell, Sesshy finding out he's pregnant would be something in itself. That would cause a lot of angst and issues, and it would add some goodness to the plot. I think it'd be a good move especially since Sesshoumaru seems afraid to tell his father or anyone else his secret, so I can only imagine what would happen if he got knocked up. So�I'm going to vote for Mpreg for this fiction. I won't be mad or upset if you decide not to do it, but I just thought since you wanted some feedback on that, I'd let you know my opinion.
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From ANON - Inuhime on May 13, 2014
OOHhhh, I'm sooo happy this got updated!!! YAY!!! TY!!!! If it's not too much to ask please update sooner next time XD" Just love this coupling.

PS: I think Sessh. surprise mpreg would be hilarious, as clearly neither one would expect it, and I love to see Sessh. have to explain that one. XD"
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From ANON - Angel on May 13, 2014
To be quite honest I don't see this story as being an mpreg. That's just my opinion on it. Keep up the good work. :)
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From LadySesshoumaru on May 12, 2014
now an unexpected pregnancy would really throw there lil' hidden romps into the open and there would be so much drama sounds juicy would definitely want to read how papa dog would react to that and that sess is banging kouga....great story
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From ANON - ????????? on May 12, 2014
Yes, to continue, liking the story. No to the m-preg....
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