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Reviews for The Seduction Game

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From ANON - Kotori-sama on January 30, 2016
I know you haven't update this story in a long time, but it's such a shame to leave such a fantastical read unfinished. I would truly love it if you might one day consider updating it with a new chapter. Pretty, pretty, pretty please? :D
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From ANON - Sunnydiggy on December 03, 2015
Hello,

I am very interested in your fan fiction and would like to continue to read any future updates. I do however, would like point out many parts of your story seem to be "proving your intelligence". I hope this does not seem to blunt to brusque, but the full debates, paragraphs of full equations are most certainly useful in establishing character building. Sometimes though they will alienate readers. I do have to say though I do enjoy the Easter eggs once in a while. In the case of a few chapters, I ended up scrolling through whole paragraphs, to reach the story line again. In all though I do appreciate all the work placed in to this work and eagerly wait for future updates

Thank you,
Sunday
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From ANON - Evelyn on October 03, 2014
Pleeeease write more!!!!!

I've not enjoyed a good fanfic in a LONG time!!!

Please email me when you update!!! xx
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From ANON - k.a.a-inu on October 29, 2012
Ah! This is quite a lovely story! I am excited to see where you are going with this :) til next time!
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From NarcissusInChains on April 07, 2011
I absolutely love this! I just found it and I'm sad to see it hasn't been updated in almost 2 years. I just wanted to pipe up and say you've got a great story going here, and you're still gaining new readers if you decide to pick it up again! :)
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From Sagura87 on February 10, 2011
Hello, me again.
I was bored and decided to read your reviews, seeing as you mention them at the beginning of each new chapter, it piqued my interest; however your last one kinda ticked me off.
@CherryFlavored : you my dear, are sorely mistaken when you said that this story repeats itself over again in each chapter.
Each chapter adds something new, something exciting that builds up the anticipation of the reader. The content is similar, yes; but not without purpose.
Shizuka Kaze puts a lot of effort into their writing and has a wonderfully detailed plot. The fact that you can't see past the words, into the hidden story beneath is your problem, for you won't be able to appreciate how truly wonderful and entertaining this story has been.

Shizuka Kaze, darling. keep up the wonderful work, I love this story and am very patiently waiting for an update whenever you can get around to it.
*huggles* loves it!!!

Sagura-hime

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From CherryFlavored on October 09, 2010
All I can say is that this story is pretty much nothing. Same scenario in every chapter. Inuyasha hits on Kagome, Kagome denies him, he keeps trying. It would be different if he had new tactics but it's all the same: he kisses her brutally, she pushes him away, they get nowhere. Adding in some sappy story in the background of it all does nothing except cause a distraction until you make up some new scene where they can replay the same thing that was in the previous chapters.

After about chapter 3 I just started skimming because it was so boring. I am curious, as a write myself, as to how you are going to make Kagome give in to Inuyasha's playboy-ness after 10 chapters-worth of her resisting everything he's already done. I was expecting something to eventually happen near Ch. 10 but, again, you have Inuyasha and Kagome playing this hard-to-get game.

It is one thing to leave a reader with a cliffhanger, or the eagerness of wanting to know what will happen next with the couple. And the overall interest to find out when they will end up having sex. But you have done none of these. Your story lacks realism in the aspect of how college works, your characters also lack any personality besides that of anger and lust, and the plot you have behind this sex-game thing is so incredibly unneeded and boring that it actually caused me to write this review.

Write up a real plot that serves some purpose and wasn't just thrown in to create more to an already boring story, and then create life within your characters that aren't driven by hatred, anger, and their "arousal" for whoever.

This story is going nowhere. Good luck on your future projects. Hopefully it doesn't turn out like this one.

BTW I read some of your reviews and responses. You were saying someone who flamed your story was being arrogant or whatever by asking if you had any real knowledge of college life. You told them to act differently next time, I believe. You should really learn to not be so hypocritical. And honestly, learn more about college life before preaching about "realism" in your story, especially after flaming your flamer with saying "this is a fanfiction".
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From Sagura87 on March 01, 2010
love Love LOVE!! this story! can't wait for the next chapter SQUEE!! Please update soon ^-^
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From Sagura87 on February 28, 2010
I love this story, you're an terrific author. Can't wait for the next chapter ^-^
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From InkashaTaisho on November 08, 2009
Hi. I'm joined this site just so I could send you a review!! I LOVE this fic so much it inspired me to write my first ever Inu/Kag story!! I'm an avid/rabid Sess/Kag fan so it's not my first fic but this will be my first in this genre though. You inspired me through your betrayal of Inuyasha. I don't usually read or go near Inu/kag, but your story caught me interest and once I started reading, I was hooked. Inuyasha is so fierce and so much more in touch with his inu nature than in most fics.I have tried to read one-shot Inu/kag, but they all seem to be so fluffy and sweet and that just not how I pictured Inuyasha behaving at all no matter how much he's in love with Kagome. I like your betrayal because he is still true to his nature but he still shows that softer side we've come to love about the roughish hanyou. But back to the story itself, I love the plot and your narrative style but you do have an bit of an issue with Kagome's eye color. I know it bluish-gray but sometimes you say it's brown that can get really confusing since Kagome is cast with both colors due to some confusion with anime and manga. Her eyes are blue in the manga but brown in the anime. Anyway, make sure to watch out for that. And if you still need a beta, I'm willing. I'm a beta as well as a part time writer. I have some chapter stuff I'm working on, but lately due to writer's block, I've been sticking to one-shots and I don't want to get out of touch with fanfic world so I started beta-ing and I find it very relaxing. So if you haven't found a beta, please contact me at my email address and we can work something out. Until your next chapter!!
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From 83Sherlock on July 13, 2009
Aw, nutbunnies! I was hoping to find yet another chapter. Keep it up. :)
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From crazyariesgirl on May 04, 2009
Thank you so much for updating! I was constantly checking back it hopes to see when the next chapter would be up. Anyway, another amazing chapter! I really can not wait for you to update again. As for your question, I would say longer chapters even though it means longer time in between each update. I haven't read a chapter I haven't loved so far, so it is worth a little wait =)!
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From LeeAnne on April 27, 2009
Oh my dear god, I found your story just leafing through looking for something quick and cheeky to read, and I got more than I bargained for, but at such an a appreciation! I couldn't leave the computer until I had gone through all 10 chapters. This is one of the best AU fan-fics I have read pertaining to Inuyasha and Kagome. I love how you kept their hot tempers and attraction for one another, while adding a little spice of your own! I don't believe you have anything to fear when it comes to writing a lemon, the build ups you create are tantalizing and may I even be so bold (and I hope I am not offending anyone) as to say that they even get me a little hot anticipating the next actions between the two. A very enjoyable tease each time... I hope that you will find the courage you need to right an amazing lemon,(I have every belief it will be) and cannot wait until your next installment!! ::adds to favorites:: Please keep up the great work :)
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From weyrdkat on April 23, 2009
So far, I am enjoying your plot and premise and the questions that come along with them. However, while I appreciate the fact that you have clearly done your research (might I venture a guess that you took lots of Economics?) I feel that the long breaks of information on their class information takes away from your story's flow. A few sentences would suffice without full paragraphs. I honestly skimmed over it the first time and skipped it every time after. That also goes for the huge description of Inuyasha's room. While you may have the whole of it mapped out in your mind, unless Kagome or Inuyasha are specifically paying attention to something in the room, you don't need to go into so much detail because it quickly takes the reader out of the action and drags on. I don't mean offense because I'm enjoying your story I just wanted to give you some tips (I work as an editor and majored in Professional Writing). I really like your characterization of Kagura and Izayoi.
Oh, one other thing -- I like that you respond to your readers, but you might want to put the responses at the bottom, especially if you are going to respond to MM, AFF, and FF on every site. It pushes your story way down on the page and distracts from your actual work. Just my opinion on that one -- the other tip is backed by experience and lots of books.
Thanks for the recommendation of "Scented Candles." I'm already a HUGE fan of Wendy's (LOVE LOVE Shades of Gray).
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From Reymond on April 14, 2009
So glad to read your story again !!! Sometimes, there is a pretty story (such yours), deep, rich, so good and ... nothing more, one month, one year, bouououououhhhhh ! And when, as by miracle, it appears again, that's all delight and joyce in my heart ! Thank you ! Long chapter or not, I'm unable to do a choice : you write it as you feel, don't you ? I prefer the quality when the chapter comes on my screen...

A french mother and reader,
Bonjour de la France !

Merely Truth
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