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Reviews for Devotion that Withstands Time

By : RougeFugitive
  • From ANON - Random Crazy Person on September 24, 2006
    Yay another great chapter!! I'm always checking for updates on this story. It was awesome I loved it keep up the good work!!
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  • From TheRealHotaru on September 14, 2006
    That story was so darn good it isn't funny. Go me, I'm married to Inuyasha *sings happly*. Ok Only thing I did't like was what he did to my poor back side. But your the writer so i guess I'll have to live with it. I just hope I can sit down tomarrow.
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  • From ANON - Random Crazy Person on September 14, 2006
    Yay!!! Another awesome chapter. Fighting, sex, and ramen, its all good!
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  • From ANON - Wow123 on September 13, 2006
    Cont....
    I really like your story..I just it needs to be improved more, so you can have a real winner on your hands.....
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  • From ANON - Wow 123 on September 13, 2006
    I really like your story....but you really need to focus on a few things. First, If your piece is first person, you really need to keep if in first person. You seem to keep switching it back and forth between narrative to first person. Second, you really should explain how Inuyasha and the reader met. I see the demons and morals co-existed in your piece...you should really explain that to the reader before hand. Set up your story more...make your characters really come to life....Why is the reader scaried that Inuyasha will leave her for another woman??? What role does Kagome in Inuyasha life??? Why did she want to see Inuyasha again??? Your story is missing so much information.....

    Please do not take my critique of your story as a flame....I AM NOT FLAMING YOUR STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Random Crazy Person on September 07, 2006
    Best reader/Inuyasha story ever!!! Please update soon your an amazing writer!!!!!
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