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Reviews for Coming of Age

By : sootnsab

From ANON - shelisa68 on July 01, 2015
I love this story can u please update soon
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From ANON - shelisa68 on June 30, 2015
I love this story can u please update soon
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From yeiko87 on June 05, 2015
*fans self* hot! very well written.
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From on July 11, 2010
xD This is my favorite couple! Sess/Older Rin! No matter what others say (there is even campaign anti-Sess/Rin O.o). And this is one of my favorite one-shots of this couple (I read this, for the first time, sometime ago). That's because Sesshoumaru "attacks" Rin, but don't become a rape. Other fics, that has the same idea, to take the story to the violence, angst e dark. No other, which begins with a Sesshoumaru's attack, complete with a happy ending. Therefore, this is one of my favorite fics oneshots. I'd like you to write another fic about this couple, because you write very well. Perhaps a fic of 5 or 6 chapters... One idea I liked a lot, but nobody ever wrote it well: mating rituals of youkais. Always an enemy appears, and attacked the couple (in most cases, kidnaps Rin). This fact makes the fic losing its way. I mean, fics lemon/hentai. It loses all "grace". It adds a lot of drama, angst, dark... losing the initial proposal would be a lemon fic... Perhaps a rival... in the beginning. Just to make a jealous Sesshoumaru... and then he "wakes up"! With possessiveness and jealousy! And firmly decides he wants to stay with Rin and begin the youkai ritual. The ritual could be "increase intimacy between partners in seven days". Starting with a chaste kiss and going to lemon. And other things... as a demonstration of strength of the male, presents for the female etc.
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From Archfiend on June 05, 2008
full of hot steamy sex, written in an excellent way. I`m only sorry thaat this is to be a one-shot. Ah well, I suppose one can`t have everything
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From Irishfaery on July 08, 2007
That has absolutely got to be the best story I have read in a LONG LONG time! You write beautifully with such emotion and attention to detail. Keep up the great work!!!!!
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From sootnsab on April 24, 2007
Thank for the suggestion.

and yeah the "Rin in heat" angle is used often but that is why I wanted to try it out. It is my first oneshot so I wanted it to be short enough to read but not so short you got nothing out of it. And grammar/spelling is one of my biggest short comings...so please feel free to let me know when and where I make mistakes.

And as for Sesshomaru's release, well I just thought that he would say something like tha; his normal speach pattern is hard to use for sex talk so I put that in there if for no other reason a snicker.

Thanks for the reviews!
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From ANON - liliesformary on April 24, 2007
I think the "Rin in Heat" angle has been covered quite a bit, but it works. Maybe try to build up more emotion between the two of them next time? PWP is great and all, but it's nice to have a little feelings behind it. You change tense in a few places and there are a few spelling errors, but otherwise I liked it. I almost missed Sesshomaru's thought at the end, because you used asterics (**) for it. Try to keep thoughts in apostrophes ('). I thought that was an author's note for a minute.

Sesshomaru's "I'm going to release inside you" did make me LOL a little. Like his version of "baby, I'm gonna come." *snicker*

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From sootnsab on April 23, 2007
Dear KitenKaiba,

First I would like to thank you for reviewing my writing. I am happy for anyone and everyone to review regardless of opinion. If anything I thank you for being honest.

I would like to address each of your questions in the order you have stated them.

1. �why is Rin so old?�

To be honest I don�t agree with under aged sex. I do not advocate anyone under the age of 18 having sex in real life and neither do I agree in fiction. While I would never criticize another�s work if there were under aged sex, I will never write a story with sex between people younger than 16. Also with Sesshomaru being as old and wise as he is, I doubt he would want a woman that hadn�t even fully blossomed nor would he want to mate with a human, yet alone one so young, seeing as how the younger you are the less successful the birthrate and the more likely you are to have an unhealthy baby. With someone as obsessed with power and strength as Sesshomaru is, he would want the healthiest pups possible.

2. �in fuddle Japan ppl are lucky to live to be 25 if there out side of villages and medical care Rin lives a tuff life and would probably look rather worn down by 19�

Sesshomaru would not let Rin look worn down because she is associated with him and his royal bloodline. Also as a demon I�m sure there are other means of health care outside of what humans know. In a feudal fantasy series like InuYasha there are many ways to acquire health beyond human means.

3. �as far as her sent being special pleas can I ask why if you were trying to keep ppl happy by not making her a little kid fine make her 16 tops because at that time 14 year olds were baring kids so pleas tell me. Why is her sent special now and stronger then other times�

I am not and do not try to make others happy with my writing. I write only to please myself and take great joy if others are pleased with it as well. As a writer I have creative freedom and choose to write whatever I want, however I want to. And as I have stated I do not write stories with under age sex for personal reasons/beliefs.

As for her scent that can be explained medically. This happens in real life. The average woman starts her period between the ages of 14-16, it take about three years for a woman menstrual cycle to become regular. During those three years birthrate is low and birth defects are more likely. Around the age of 19-25 a woman�s body is at it�s physical peak and this is the best time to have children (I�m not saying that you can�t have kids before or after, just that medically this is the best time) Because a woman�s body can best procreate at this time, the pheromones scent changes to be more mature and strong to attract the opposite sex so that a woman can produce offspring at this ideal time.

4. �why has Sesshoumaru waited so long to have her considering humans short life spans and/or why its taken this long for him to realizes he wants her�

I don�t know ask him�I�m kidding. I think that Sesshomaru doesn�t want a human mate, I think we can all agree to that. So I�m sure he�s going through some inner turmoil and it wasn�t until her scent changed and his natural animal instincts took over that he realized his true desire. Also with Sesshomaru�s life span being as long as it is he may not want to take a human mate knowing he will have to watch them die. Which leads me to the fact that yes where Rin�s life is short that doesn�t mean that he doesn�t want what time he has left. The emotions of the heart do not follow reason.

I thank you again for your questions and encourage others to ask me or suggest things too. And while I enjoy feedback also keep in mind that this is a story; a fictional story written for amusement and is not restrained by logic. If it were then it wouldn�t be art, it wouldn�t be creative and it wouldn�t be fun.

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From KitenKaiba on April 22, 2007
Ok this story only had one flaw as far I can see the stile of writhing was grate the grammar and spelling was good too but why is Rin so old? I mean there in fuddle Japan ppl are lucky to live to be 25 if there out side of villages and medical care Rin lives a tuff life and would probably look rather worn down by 19 and as far as her sent being special pleas can I ask why if you were trying to keep ppl happy by not making her a little kid fine make her 16 tops because at that time 14 year olds were baring kids so pleas tell me
Why is her sent special now and stronger then other times and why has Sesshoumaru waited so long to have her considering humans short life spans and/or why its taken this long for him to realizes he wants her

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From nchsmi on April 21, 2007
I really enjoyed this story! I can not wait to see what you will write next! B reading U
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From vikikibouki on April 19, 2007
I read it, then re-read it. Fantastic! Okay, there are several spelling errors, but when you're reading and you're into the heat of the moment, you don't notice it as much. I wouldn't change any aspect of this story. Actually , I'm REALLY hoping that you add on to it and that you don't leave it as a one-shot. It's way to good to neglect. There aren't many Sess/Rin fics that are as well written as this one. I could see everything happen in my minds' eye while reading. Kudo's luv, cause it's worth it.
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From Starlight1 on April 19, 2007
I really enjoyed reading this. I could actually see this happening.
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From ANON - myname??? on April 19, 2007
kick ass story probably one of the best lemons with rin and Sesshomaru i've read lately. hope to hear more.
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From ANON - animegirl007 on April 19, 2007
I forgot there were a few words spelled wrong, but you got the general idea....But, like I said before it was "EXCELLENT!!!"
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