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By : Xagzan

From SnuggleErika on June 21, 2008
I just read the chapter when the babies are born. My son is 7 months old and you got the birth TOTALLY correct. I have never been louder, meaner, or have a dirtier mouth then when I was in labor. Well done!
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From Obsession1988 on April 21, 2008
Chapter 23
That.... was not what I expected to happen at the end. Miroku showing up as Ayame's mate?! That was definitely a shock. I know you said you had other plans for Ayame in your story, but honestly I never thought you would have meant anything like that. Now don't get me wrong, I don't condone this pairing, it's just that it was the farthest thing from my mind.
I thought it was a great idea to have each of the children refer to their second mom (the one that did not actually give birth to them) as either mommy Kagome or mommy Sango. It is a nice way to differentiate who each child is referring to. And the bit about playing fetch, that was a nice add in. It's always good to have some humor thrown in.
Well, you did a wonderful job with this story and I'll be looking forward to the next one. (I wonder. Just how many women do you plan on making Miroku sleep with before he gets to Ayame.....)

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From Obsession1988 on April 21, 2008
Chapter 22
Damn.... that was just.... damn. Ok, this was definitely one of your better chapters. That has to be the longest lemon you have written so far. It's also one of the only times where all I can say about the length is that it was perfect. You really enjoy turning Kagome and Sango into little wanton bitches don't you?
I also loved the way that you ended this chapter. Having Kohaku and Rin get a free show was most unexpected, but utterly enjoyable to read. At least now they won't need to ask any questions pertaining to either what Kagome Sango and InuYasha were out doing or what "to" do when they get old enough.
Backing up to the beginning of this story however, I do have one thing to say about the way you put that together. I may not be an expert, or experienced in any way on this topic, but I think that you should have written the beginning with Kagome and Sango more exhausted. I was under the assumption that right after birthing, the new mothers would be too tired to do anything other than fall asleep shortly after first seeing their newborn baby. Even if they weren't, and wanted to get some nourishment into the newborn before they nodded off, I still believe that it would be somewhat of a struggle for them to stay awake. Personally I would have moved that breastfeeding conversation into the next day were they would have been more alert and not so drained.

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From Coldstone on April 20, 2008
Thank you for one amazing story.

I liked it very much.

Epecially that Kagomes Friends are now familiar with all of her adventures.

Maybe you can get them included in you next story as well? (Sure it is Mirokus and Ayames story after all ^^ But Hope never dies). Thank you very much.
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From Obsession1988 on April 17, 2008
Chapter 21
Ok, this chapter was pretty well done. All of the scenes with Kagome and Sango were fairly accurate (because of my never having witnessed or overheard a birthing I can't really judge this part too well). I will say however that InuYasha should have been a little bit more flustered and not as calm as he was at the time he went back into the hut after his little duel with Sesshomaru. That little bit was a bit of a surprise for me but it was obviously well thought out. It was defiantly a very good way to keep InuYasha's mind off of his current concerns without taxing him further.
The part were you added Koga was a bit interesting. I was not expecting you to ever use him in this story at all. I'm glad that you kept up his normal attitude towards InuYasha (great job there). He is way to full of himself.
I must admit as well that the way you had Kagome remove InuYasha's rosary was very creative. I was beginning to wonder whether or not you were ever going to have it removed or if she was going to always have that type of control over him. I may have mentioned this to you before but I don't really care too much for the rosary.

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From SSJ04Mewtwo on April 14, 2008
This has certainly been a good story. Hmmmmm, the Miroku flashback story sounds intriguing. Hope to see that one up soon. I would advise you to move this one to the threesome/moresome section.
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From SSJ04Mewtwo on April 11, 2008
Alright, more smut! Been a long time. Hopefully you are setting up for a sequel.

This Mewtwo thanks you for the smut and will be waiting for the next chapter.
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From SharaeNightWalker on April 10, 2008
i love this story. it's going on my favourites. please write more stories sometime...Thankyou for all your work on this!
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From SSJ04Mewtwo on April 06, 2008
Good chapter. It's hard to right a 'giving birth' scene when you're trying to match it with the historical time like this story takes place in.

If my history is correct, back in the 50's, fahters weren't allowed in the delivery room. Of course, that's American history. It would take some digging to find what actually happened during labor back in the Feudal Era of Japan.

Hope to see the next chapter soon and hope to see some more good lemons soon as well.
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From SSJ04Mewtwo on March 29, 2008
Oh, Inu has got problems now. Both going into labor? Kag is early. Pup must be inpatient.

That had to be the most uncomfortable situation for Sess.

This Mewtwo will be waiting on the next chapter

BTW, anyone know where the mate mark orginated? I know it was a fandom thing, but who started it?
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From ANON - Anon on March 28, 2008
great update... cute scenes with rin & kohaku... seems that sango & kagome are in labor now... wonder how inuyasha will handle them both... will be quite a funny and interesting chapter... also kaede will need help with the births... update soon... please and thank you...
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From Obsession1988 on March 27, 2008
Aww that's just depressing. The last chapter.

Anyways, great job with the Sesshomaru Rin conversation. I loved how you had him react to everything he was presented with. Rin can be quite a handful because of her lack of knowledge. what she may see as a harmless question may be something on an entirely different level for the person she is asking. (I have seen this happen many times with my cousins). The little bit that you added there at the end of their conversation was absolutely perfect, and also very true (well at least for most guys). Having her thank Sesshomaru for helping her out with how guys view love actually had me thinking. Before I read Rin's thoughts I was under the same assumption that Sesshomaru was under. That he was of no help at all. However, having Rin's mind fallow that line of thought shows a little more intelligence than most would believe she had. Personally I loved it.

I was a little disappointed though, that the Kohaku/Rin section was not longer. It was just starting to get good. Though I will admit that to fallow that story line would mean veering off from the actual story.

lastly I also enjoyed the little conversations that Sango had with InuYasha while having contractions. They weren't overly hilarious but they were pretty funny. I bet I can also guess how you will explain how/why Kagome is going to be giving birth at the same time as Sango. However, I will not say anything in this review in case there are people who do not want anything ruined for them or given away who may be reading my reviews.

The only thing that currently keeps me from completely flipping out right now it the little "to be continued" at the bottom of your fic. Hope it comes soon.

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From Obsession1988 on March 24, 2008
Don't worry, you did a fine job with the baby shower. I (being a guy myself) do not know all THAT much about baby showers, however I have had to show up at a few of them in order to save some of my friends from the whole experiance. So, I at least know some of what happens (but don't ever fully want to know). The little bit with the cake was interesting, but I would have expected that type of reaction for an enormous amount of ramen. Also, (this is just me being very technical again) dogs mainly die from eating chcolate so I don't think that InuYasha would have eaten that cake. Unless you already knew this and were just using it as a joke.
What a perfect way to end this chapter. Sesshomaru is definatly not the person to be asking that type of question. I can't wait to see what his reaction is going to be.
All in all this chapter flowed pretty well and there were only a few spelling errors and extra words added so I'd say that again you did a very good job (considering you have no Beta... that's still true right?).
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From SSJ04Mewtwo on March 21, 2008
Good chapter. Lol! Rin gets the best line award for this chapter...,'lazy bum', priceless. Sess's left eye must be twitching about now.

Being a male author myself I too would have a huge problem writing about a baby shower. However, since this is based off of an Anime, what happened here could possibly happen in an Anime setting. At least Inu's mishap. Hm, I've always wondered if inu youkai could eat chocolate unlike their dog cousins.

This Mewtwo will wait on the next chapter.

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From Obsession1988 on March 20, 2008
Chapter 18
Naughty little children. You're just having a lot of fun with Sota, Shippo, and Rin aren't you. Rin chose the 'perfect' person or rather youkai to tell THAT secret to. Shippo can't ever keep his mouth closed so he just has to blurt it out. I hope you do incorperate that conversation between InuYasha and Sesshomaru. That holds many promises.
I thought it was actually very clean and easy the way that you had Sango pretty much tell Sota to back off. That was a pretty unhealthy attraction for Sota to habe, because if it were to get too serious then InuYasha would have to step in.
I don't believe I have ever read a story that even hinted at a Rin Kohaku pairing. It will be interesting to see were this leads.
Question: what are you doing for Kohaku's opinion of InuYasha's mating with both Kagome and his sister? You did not mention wether or not he knows who the father is yet or for that matter have him in the story at all. Not sure but isn't this the first time he's come into your story? Being a demon slayer he should have some type of reaction to his only sister mating with a hanyou. I mean traveling with one and learning to coexist are one thing but.... I think you get were I'm going.
That's just positively evil, busting Sesshomaru like that.... I love it. But because you chose to use Kagome's heightened sense of smell, I hope you do not dismiss the fact that InuYasha would have a much easier time detecting a forign smell on his brother. Oh the possibilities.
Hope you update soon.
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