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Reviews for Untamed: Lecherous Hand, Wandering Iris

By : Xagzan
  • From Archfiend on June 30, 2008
    I really like your story so far, and as you have chosen a mode of telling a story that shows the ending somewhat, it has also been made clear that your story will contain many more chapters, which is really good, as there are many issues left. I hope to see another Update soon as I still wonder about Miroku`s companion (how sincere is he) and the feud for instance, so please update soon.
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  • From Obsession1988 on May 01, 2008
    Well, I see you finally posted the first chapter for your new story. This was most definitely a good beginning. I will say that the flow and clarity in which you wrote this chapter was noticeably better than the beginning of ITT (I'm not putting ITT down in any way, just mentioning that you are a better writer now). I wasn't totally expecting you to write the story as if it were really taking place right after the last chapter in ITT. It was more of a pleasant surprise though because with you writing the story this way you will have a few more topics you can write about later on. You know how I am, I love to read/hear about people's reactions to various things, and this story has plenty of promise in that category.

    When you mentioned what you were doing for your next story I was wondering exactly how you were going to have Miroku meet the majority of the women he was with before he met up with Ayame. I think that going to brothels was definitely a good route to go, but I will mention one thing on this topic. Depending on how close to the anime series you want to stay, I would suggest at least having one or two occasions were while he was staying in a village he happened to seduce the maidens who were catering to him. I know you must have already been planning something along these lines but I just had to say it because I hate it when authors stick to one idea and run with it through the entire story without having any type of variety. It just gets boring.

    I’m not one to always admit this but I was actually a little shocked to see that you basically cut-off a lemon scene and made it seem as though the story was done. But it was true to the situation. No one there (well I guess except for Ayame) would actually want to hear the "details" of what happened at that point in his story. Also, the way you picked up were his story left off was something that you could fully expect from him. Nice job on that.

    One thing that I just have to throw out there is that I believe you have successfully made Ayame more of a pervert than Miroku. I mean seriously, someone who enjoys listening to a pervert's sex stories and then screws him afterwards. I think that is worse than Miroku.

    Well, I guess that's all I have to say for now so I'll just be waiting for the next update. Please make it soon! There's getting to be less and less "good" stories for me to read out there.

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