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From Archfiend on July 04, 2008
I was quite surprised when I read the part between Bankotsu and Jakotsuseeing as this is a different Bankotsu in the manga, though this is not so bad, as Jakotsu deserves a bit of fun.other than that I wassurprised about your concept of mating in this story, as it is quite different than the concept you present us with in many of your other stories. Quite refreshing. I had to chuckle at kagura`s remark about Sesshoumaru sleeping alone that night, seems as though see knows how to deal with him. I was a bit dissappointed of the MirokuxSango situation, because seeing the situation they were in, I had hoped for a bigger scene, though the reasons Miroku gave are understandable as to why he cut the situation off. At least he told her about his feelings. see you at the next chapter (eagerly awaited)
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From Darknessdawns on July 01, 2008
Well, I see that the story has caught up here. I can't wait until you add more, I really love this story. Also I understand your need not to include Shippo. Although he could be used as a friend for Rin later on in the story. I don't really care either way as long as you keep writing. Also I understand about life getting in the way of writing and/or reading (in my case). Just update when you can. Your fans will try to wait as patiently as possible, and we will still be here when you get time. By the way, good luck with your stories they are all wonderful.
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From Archfiend on June 30, 2008
Sorry for the lack of review of the previous chapter, so here goes for two. firstly I must say, you really show how much of a seducer Naraku is, though the fact that Kikyou seems to be genuienely feeling somethin for naraku makes her a bit OOC, and the way you portray her is completly opposite to the manga for there she seems rather prudish, or serene even sometimes, because of her position.I must also say I liked how fast Sango acted after her talk with Kagome, though that last kiss was extremely romantic. The wa you portrayed Jakotsu was perfect. I already had to smile remembering his antics.The story is now cetainely heat up as the wheels are set into motion. Oh, and is there something going one between kagura and Sesshoumaru, because if so, then that certainely did not take long
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From Archfiend on June 28, 2008
I now realize the previous review was written quite sloppishly, though I`d clearly like to state that I did not compare kagome`s grandpa to Naraku. How could I. I was merely stating tha you seemed very hash towards him, very few believe in either youkai, hanyou or the shikon no tama and seeing a method to bolster the meagre coffers of the shrine, who can blame him? Back to the current chapter. This chapter was gruesome. The image of the frozen people is horrifying. Thank ggod there was a bit of comic relieve with kagome`s remak about Jaken`s colour of skin that Rin made. I was quite starled how clean and efficient you took Kouga out of the story. I am looking forward in seeing the Shichintai in action (Jakotsu especially, that guy was funny) and their means of fighting in battle. I also hope we will soon get to see the Tetsuaiga in battle, would be really nice. Otherwise I like the way you portray Kanna, as an indecisive girl who has not yet grown up, though who wants to be treated as an adult nonetheless, a bit like Shippou ) whom you don`t seem overl fond of in your stories, but that`s another thing) Oh yes, the idea of a comptur -freak jaken is hilarious, excellent idea, just the image is great.
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From Archfiend on June 28, 2008
I think you are very harsh to Kagome`s grandfather, seeing as youkai and hanyou are still considered the stuff of legends in your story, and something like the Shikon Jewel as well otherwise this chapter shos ver clearly how evil and cruel Naraku is, and I must say your depiction of him makes him seem something of an even more of a monster than in the manga. You also showed him to be a person who has an ultimate goal an already has the masterplan to reach, where even occurences like the one with kagura do not seem to matter to the overall pla. What I missed though was a more elaborate discussion about the information both Sango and Kagura gave them. It seemed so. well as if you wait for hours for some important meeting and then everything is said in two sentences, a bit Wtf? was that why I had to wait for so long?
P.S: as we are nearing the end of your daily postings, do you plan on updating reguraly are just ever onece in a while, seeing as the chapter have to be written and then betaed, which I know takes up quite an amount of time
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From Archfiend on June 27, 2008
Well, a very story lasty chapter. The gang find Kagura and learn a lot about sango`s real enemy Naraku so logially the group will think about how to get rid of Naraku next, though the story of the Shikon no Tama intrigues me . Then there is the problem of Naraku`s powers, what does he have and how was he able to overpower a youkai if he is human, i think there may be some more to him that meets the eye. It`going to be reall interesting if kagura finds out that kanna actually shocked her out of the air, thereby unwillingly setting her free- that truly is twist of fate. Kanna is still a mystery to me, though I suppose she suffers from Stockholm Syndrome. between them Sango and Kagura have told the gang quite a lot without wanting to incidentally, I hope that does not make Sango do anything stupid, though I was touched about miroku`s power surge , when he assumed Sango was being harmed, he truly cares for her. Though his level of power also does not seem to be fully exploited yet. What his reactions reminded me of were the power surges that Inuyasha experiences when he has to protect Kagome, or in many of your other stories where they are mates, it is described in a similar way. Well..., whata cliffie you left at the end of the chapter... cannot wait for more !! I hope they are going to kick naraku`s ass.
P.S.: You insert an awful lot of Japanes tradition, culture and religion into your story and I absolutely loveit, it makes it so authentic and really showa how much hard work you you have to da the write a chapter, though yould you explain the names thing, I did not quite get it in the story or a least maybe a link. I`d be really grateful

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From Archfiend on June 26, 2008
If Kanna is devoid of any emotions, how can she feel pain or pleasure, or be a masochist at all? Otherwise your idea of making Kikou kaede`s daughter is interesting and gives the story a nice twist. Otherwise not much happen, except sango being counseled on her fears. I suppose kagura will meet with Sango quite soon though I am quite interested in whether that will turn into a fight and if Inuyasha can use the Tetsuaiga as in the manga. Oh the anticipation (gleefully rubs hands)
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From Archfiend on June 25, 2008
I was a bit wounded at your thoughts of me reading the chapters before they are posted here. Aside from that what a chapter!! We are now on familiar terrain, and the persons seem to be more and more displayed as in the manga, seeing as you let Sango find her lost acestr in way as a Demon- Slayer and the roles of the other in the group houshi,miko, hanyou) as well.I also like the thought of Naraku taking control of Kagura via black-mail, because in the end it is the same method he uses as in the manga, he once again has a hold on her heart. While not literally as in the manga, still metaphorically speaking. This thoughalready shows a Kaura with feelings, something that had to evolve in the manga. (I hope we see a Sesshoumaru/Kagura part somewhere) The big question though is how the Shikon fits into the story. For here we have the exact opposite of the situation than in the manga, as there are no shards presumably Things certainly are looking up good.

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From Archfiend on June 24, 2008
It really is funny that Inuyasha of all people gives Mroku advice on the subject of love.Fickle little thing isn`t it love?. Yet still there is this issue about Sango`s dreams. I thinkk Sango`s dreams about what has happened are there because she has found new friends, paradoxially. On the other hand it`s quite logical seeing as Sango is practically living together with Inuyasha, Miroku and kagome and the four of them have made something that resembles a family in a way, and thus Sango has acquired a new family, meaning that the memories of her old one will return as her emotional eally havve been torn down. I mean she sees kagome as a sister, has fallen in love with Miroku and Inuyasha has taken her with him as he presented Kagome tohis family,making her a very close friend indeed. Otherwise keep up the good work will ya? Oh, and in the last chapters I noticed that you jumped into the lemon scenes without preparation,it makes it a bit harder to read as there is absolutely no warning of an impending lemon scene and one cannot prepare, it is a though you were on peaceful meadow and the next second in the midst of a hot sex scene, biig difference. Will you keep that sort of style up, or will you revert to your old style?
P.S.: Please don`t kill me for asking ok?
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From Darknessdawns on June 24, 2008
I got really behind lately thats why I havent been reviewing like every one else. Any way I love where you have taken the story so far. I just have one question, are you going to bring Shippo into this story? Anyway this chapter and all of them that I have read have been well written as always. I love how you have Inuyasha's demon blood come to the for front when he is 'with' Kagome. I also love how you brought Rin into this story. I do hope to see more of her. She just warms my heart. Anyway I hope we get to see Miroku and Sango's relationship blossom soon as well. I may have to read some at MM. I saw that you added another chapter there. I am guessing that you are still working on this story then. I do hope so. Anyway good luck with your writing and all.
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From Darknessdawns on June 24, 2008
Yay, I finally caught up.
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From Archfiend on June 23, 2008
Well kaome said she wanted a quickie didn`t she? ;) I wonder how much Sango and Kagome will remember the next day. I zhought Sango was able to remember her brother, so hwo come she now cannot remember him or doesn`t she want to divulge the information just now. I didn`t properly get that, She will get a big shock when Miroku reveals to her what he knows. ouch! What I find interesting is the relationship with which Inuyasha sees Miroku and Sango with him. Although Miroku is his best friend, Inuyasha also cares a lot for Sango , and while this is not unusual, yet he is also strangely possesive of sango, though not nearly as much as of Kagome, though that is to be understood. I rather think Inuyasha unconciously sees the 4 of them as some sort of pack, maybe a dog instinct from his side.(I hope I am not overexerting myself again with this)This would explain many small hints of yours.I won`t sprcify now those. Interesting though is the fact that Miroku called Sango his girl, thereb voicing it for the first time that he wants a deep, intimate relationshi with this girl and how she reacted the way before I don`t think she`ll mind. Though you will be telling me of now how their realtionship is still far away from being complete and that I will have to wait, nut please a man can dream can`t he?
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From ANON - warren on June 22, 2008
great story looking forward to your next chapter
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From Archfiend on June 22, 2008
sorry for the lack of review of the previous chapter, so I`ll do both at the same time. You expended a lot of energy on the description of the situation with the translator, so I wonder what role he will continue to play in the stroy and what his motif was. The main story though with the man who harassed Sango was used in a perfect way to further Miroku`s and Sango`s relationship. Definetly set the setting for an upcoming lemon scene between them, as what miroku said at the end of the chapter was as good as a declaration of love. While in the previous chapter I had the feeling of severe hypocrisy coming from the youkai there, what the translator said convinced me. I mean even with sesshoumaru standing beside his brother and encouraging him and sccepting him the youkai are very disdainfully, really showing how crusted the traditions are and how much prejudice lives in the world. Gah, depressing isn`t it?
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From Archfiend on June 21, 2008
Where do you get the recipe for their meal it sounds delicious. I was quite able to picture all four of them in their going-out stuff, andd I must agree with miroku if your avid description has provided the proper pictures to my befuddled mind.( too much work ad sitting in front of the computer reading and writing) I actually was a bit surprised that amidst all of your great Inuyasha/Kagome liaison, there sudenly appeared a lemon scene featuring Sango, though that really clinches it. I just hope that woman gets her act together as soon as possible and confesses her feeling for Miroku to him. Just a question did Sesshoumaru show himself as a taiyoukai to Kagome`s family?
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