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Reviews for Push

By : BeautifulOblivion
  • From ANON - v on September 14, 2011
    the story is fine the way u wrote it though is painful. their are equasions of some sort that are just unessary and far too much space between
    the phrases. your presentation needs work.
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  • From scarletwitchextreme on July 04, 2009
    such an interesting story and boy did i love the threesome choices, it all seems so dark and promising and i definately havent read anything like this before so please up date soon.
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  • From Tricia1224 on May 14, 2009
    This is a very good story so far. I do like how you went back to how Kagome was feeling physically. I do have one question. Who did she bite and did she leave a mark? Ok that was two. I look forward to your next chapter.
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  • From Vyper on May 13, 2009
    This was a great chapter. It in many ways helped with the one before it. I think that it will take Kagome time to heal and if I was in her position I wouldn't want either of those boys touching me for a damn long time. I might even kick their asses. I think she should. Like sending some purifying energy into both of them for their insensitivity.
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  • From swasdiva on May 13, 2009
    I gotta agree with Viperbites. All I could think of upon reading that was MASSIVE YOUCH!!!!! ESPECIALLY for a virgin, she'd be way too tight to accommodate two men, not to mention two men who are probably, considering fanon, well endowed. She'd literally get ripped. Maybe you could revise it to include a little back door action? Just so she could more rationally take them both at once, although that would hurt like hellfire too!

    Anyway! That little scene doesn't detract from your skill as a writer. You've got a provocative, mysterious style that's instantly appealing. You pace the plot well, giving measured attention to strong characterizations as well. Yes, there are a few grammatical errors here and there, but you address those, and they're not enough to be distracting or impede your voice. I really enjoy this fic! Maybe just a few revisions here and *cough* there...
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  • From Vyper on May 13, 2009
    I'm sorry, but having two guys in you at once has gotta hurt. Especially for a virgin girl.
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  • From Lavizzy on March 08, 2009
    noooooooooooooo don't stop it there!
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  • From inuyasha7885 on January 07, 2009
    This is def interesting so far-I hope u update -I'm curious to see where it's going!
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  • From Suniko on January 02, 2009
    Hey Lissa! How are you? I see you started a new fic. So far it's really good.

    Of course its really good. Your a great writer. I always loves reading your stories. Keep it up.

    Take care,
    Suniko
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  • From L0VER on January 02, 2009
    mmhmm.. i like it. i was always a fan of naraku. yepyep, the SEXY villian. ohvery sexy. ahahah, threesomes are okay with me :D. tehhe, the more the merrier! AHA. ohman. anyway, i like it:) update soon!
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  • From ANON - Nathaniel on January 01, 2009
    Whats with the wide spacing? The reason that I am asking is because I tried to read the stoyline but got distracted by the huge gaps. I hope this information helps.
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