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Reviews for Home in Body

By : NihilEtNemo
  • From ANON - A. N. on September 28, 2009
    In reading your fiction, I was struck by a couple things…

    The first being that this was a very well written piece that was good with visuals. The imagery that came with what you wrote was fantastic and made it to where it felt as though you were watching a movie rather than reading a piece of fiction. That was great.

    However, I did notice in reading it that you had a few details wrong when it came to the physiology of dogs and the sexual area.

    As someone that grew up on a farm and dealt with dog breeding this is an area I know.

    The first thing I noticed was when you stated that a dog could orgasm for 15 minutes at a time. That’s not correct. A dog will knot with the bitch for up to 15 minutes, not orgasm. A dog will orgasm for just about the same length of time as any other animal. It’s the knotting that makes it different. The knotting is done to ensure the bitch gets pregnant and the little wiggly things make it where they are suppose to and don’t slip out. The time on knotting depends on the dog but it can be anywhere from a minute to 15 minutes.

    The next thing I noticed was you said the knot formed before the orgasm. That too isn’t correct. The knot forms after the act to act as a plug to ensure the bitch is impregnated. If the knot formed first then they male couldn’t thrust thus orgasm. The knot forms for a specific reason, not a sexual thing.

    Again, I adored the story but the wrong information kind of detracted from the overall picture for me. Don’t take this as a flame, that’s not my intent, just as some information.

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  • From GodOfInsanity on September 24, 2009
    Oh, my. I am almost speechless by the sheer beauty and flow of this story. I really do love that you wrote it in Touga's POV. It's so rare to find loving moments like this between the two, and usually it's in Sesshoumaru's POV. I am normally not big on First person, but for some reason, you really excel at writing first person stories and they're very good and hook me right away. I also like how you made their sex more like dogs. It gave it an interesting punch, indeed. It wasn't too sappy or anything. Was just right. Moderation of everything. It also had its own poetic, sensual appeal. Good job. This is definately a new favorite of mine of your stories! Superb job! ^^
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  • From BlackMaiden on September 23, 2009
    This is a very nice piece. It has the quality of poetry but the free verse of a romance novel. I must give credit, where it is due, and you have shown such potential, that we all long to see in our years of writing; past the thoughts of smut or educated words, to something more meaningful and powerful. 5 stars.


    Darkest Regards,
    BlackMaiden
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  • From Traybell on September 23, 2009
    Nice. Liked Inutaisho's inner thoughts towards Sessho. He's keeping Sessho lol can't blame him. Such a cutie, thanks for sharing.
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