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Reviews for The Twist Of Two Fates

By : MidnightAngelWings21
  • From ANON - Anon on September 01, 2014
    I want to read about Inyasha suffering more. That bastard
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  • From lara5170 on May 29, 2014
    I really am enjoying this story, I read the 1st part of it along time ago & then read the rest of it just recently but I was having a hard time understanding what was going on or following the storyline. So I decided to reread it from the very start. There are many spelling errors & incorrect words used during some parts but as I continued to read I was able to figure out what was going on. There are some parts that I just don't understand. From the way Kagome's body changed & from what she said about when she was young & she had these markings, it seems as if she's never really been 'just a human miko' but, likely an inu-miko all her life. What I can't figure out is how other than the scattered details that have been brought up & that Taisho & Kenji refer to her as inu-miko or inuyoukai but it seems as if Kagome has never known & still has no idea. How is it that in all this time no one was able to tell by scent, her aura , her power or any of the other ways other demons, miko's, or Priests are able to tell what type of being she is?
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  • From ANON - kittymewloverofthetuberose on September 27, 2013
    English doesn't seem to be your first language,however your story is awesome!
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  • From sesshoumarusmate on April 13, 2013
    omg this is AMAZING!! its so hot and i cant get enough of this story please update soon!!!
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  • From lara5170 on March 26, 2013
    I just found this story today and read it. I really enjoyed it and I don't know if it's complete but I hope it isn't. I'm confused about 1 thing though, what was she talking about after the 1st time the markings (crown thingy?)showed up on her & she said she had these markings as a child but her family used a spell to hide them. I'm also curious to know if Gin is also an Inu youkai or Inu tai youkai (like Sessh & his dad)? I also don't remember if it described what Gin looked like, so I think I've got to go back & read it..I can't wait to find out more about what they did Inu & if they really removed Inu's dick.
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  • From estelin on March 06, 2013
    this is awesome i hope that there will be more to come one day. keep up the amazing work and writing
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  • From ANON - Shikalover_94 on February 10, 2013
    Awsome story I couldn't stop reading once I started lol wish there were more
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  • From Darkness-living-in-Hope on October 22, 2012
    omg just love this story! i`m in love with gin and kenji. they are awesome. looking forward to more chapters
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  • From Danyealle on October 16, 2012
    I enjoyed the plot of this! It has a great deal of potential!

    However, I did notice several things...

    The first of which is that you tend to have sentences that run on far too long. The first paragraph is an example of that. It should probably be two, if not three, sentences instead of one. Chopping it up that way makes it easier to read and comprehend. On the flip side, there are are also sentences that were divided up when they should have been combined. This makes the flow hard to maintain as you get jarred out as your brain tries to put things 'right' and focus.

    The second issue is you tend to waffle between tenses. The last paragraph is an example of that. The 'she passes out' should be passed out. Tenses are important for keeping the flow of the story going and not jarring you out of things. If you don't have a beta, I would suggest just sitting it aside for 24 hours before posting then giving it another read through to check things. You wouldn't believe what you catch if you do that.

    Beyond that, there were issues with comma usage. Sometimes you put them in places they didn't belong and, other times, didn't place them where they needed to be.

    I would strongly suggest finding a beta to go over this. Doing that, and having a second set of eyes look things over, could give it a better polish than it has now.

    Overall, it's a good story with a great deal of potential with just some minor things that need worked. on. Good job!
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