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Reviews for Odd Combinations

By : RedFox
  • From ANON - Pixie on June 13, 2016
    More I demand more Please with a cherry on top
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  • From bertabee1 on November 20, 2014
    I just found your story its really good. I think its an easy read. Please continue I like to see where you go with this.
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  • From Speedykitten on March 15, 2014
    Love the story its to bad I can't favorite it so I'll know when you update. All I can do is keep watch for its update
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  • From demonsangel on January 08, 2014
    I'm sorry! I didn't mean to make thins harder for you lol. Let me see if I can fix this. When I said I like the short chapters because you don't cram a ton in, I did mean that, but more, I mean that you don't use TONS of excess filler just to say one thing. I hate reading 10 pages to get to one point or worse, having so much crammed in you're head explodes. If you want to make them longer go for it! It gives me more to read and I think you can easily find a nice ballance that works for you!

    Also, I read the other persons comments (can't remember their name, sorry ^^; ) I do agree still maintain I like how you show the different people in telepathy, but agree that adding a simple "responded so and so" for example would also help and allow you to cut back a bit if you want. Either way, I can't wait to read more, gets me through the winter break lol.

    Oh, on this part "“Well..” Shizuru sighed, “at least you’re not going to have these lugs protecting you from now on." did you mean "at least you are/will have" ?

    Great job, looking forward to more!
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  • From demonsangel on January 07, 2014
    You're welcome! I agree, personalities do take time, especially with someone like Hiei, and honestly, even when he does reach that point, I suspect it would probably still be fairly subdued and private ya know? Thank you for the different ways to identify the telepathy, especially with Kurama as his two sides can make it rather hard at times.

    Oh dear, looks like Kagome is busted lol. I can't WAIT for Inuyasha to find out...he is going to need to be sat into the next century just to get him to listen! Shippo will probably love being around Kurama though. I like how you are breaking the story up instead of cramming everything into one long chapter.

    Can't wait to read more! By the way, I find the timing of your story just hilarious. I just found my old yuyu hakusho gameboy advanced game XD
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  • From ANON - Kotori-sama on January 06, 2014
    You said you wanted reviews so I'll give you one. To be honest, I am interested in your story. I highly enjoy crossover stories between Inuyasha and Yuyu Hakusho as there are not that many of them, but I am slightly disappointed by what little I have already read. For one, the chapters are quite short. That's a big annoyance to any reader. I managed to read each chapter in two minutes and that was frustrating to say the least. There just wasn't enough needed material to keep the attention for long and by the time I finished it I felt like I had barely begun reading anything. I seriously would suggest that you make your coming chapters longer then these tiny one page papers you call chapters. Secondly, before you decide to post anything new, stop and read it thoroughly to check for any errors and edit them until they look better. Also, if you have the means to, you should let someone else, other then yourself, look through what you've written to see if they can help improve it as well. I understand that getting chapters out there faster for us to read is important, but posting your story in an unedited form is not exactly any better either. Just keep in mind that you need to re-read everything you've written with a critical eye until it looks correct. Finally, I'm sorry, but the use of bold, italic, and underline print for each character whenever using telepathy is an outright eye sore. That is not something many readers enjoy seeing when reading any story and I personally find them very offensive. It's like trying to read something a middle school child wrote. If you need to use something to show a character is using the power of telepathy then the use of only one of those is sufficient, not all three! It would be best if you just used the italics for the telepathic thoughts and then mention which character spoke which sentence, instead of trying to differentiate each character using such a sloppy method.

    I hope that you will keep in mind that as harsh as all of this sounds, as a reader - it is my wish to help improve the author through creative criticism and personal opinion. Now that you've read what I have had to say, I sincerely hope that you will take my words to heart and strive to do better. Until then, I shall look forward to your next chapter.

    *Kotori-sama
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  • From demonsangel on January 06, 2014
    *whines* Nooo!!! I want more! lol. Just started reading this, unless I found it before when it started and forgot...anyways! I love this and 5 chapters is not enough! I can't wait to read more. I love this particular crossover as it works so well!
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