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Hmmmm, interesting. Update soon!

well, it was a nice start. but i know u can do better than this. I could help u. Just give me a email! babielxd@netscape.net

It's a good beginning. I need to read the next chapter to be able to see where you are going with it, but it's good so far.

Your right, your spelling and gramer is a little off, but hey my isn't much better. Maybe you should conster getting a bader. As for the story itself. Its good so fare, you could give just a little bet more detale, and space some things out, so people can understand what you are trying to say easer. As for the next chap (which you better have) you can have it strate out with Kagome agring to live with Kaete and her moving in with her. Then you can eather strate the next chap 6 years later, or just jump time in chap 2 to 6 year later. Eather way, I like this story is has a lot of potichle to be really great, it just need a little work and some twicking. Don't give up. You are doing fine so far. Can't wait for the next chap. Ja ne, for now. ^^