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May 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love it keep going update soon! please and thank you!!!
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May 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
update soon
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May 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this was a really good chapter!! update when you can!!
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May 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Whew! That was a cool ass chapter. I hope you update soon.^___^
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April 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very good story update soon please and thank you!!!!
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April 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was great chapter! Can't wait to read more! Well update soon!
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April 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Totally hot and sexy. I like that you've added Koga and Ayame too. And now you've brought the swords in. Great! However, I may be slow, but I really didn't quite grasp the history you were trying tell about them. Could you clarify it a little more in the next chappie ^_^ Another great chapter, thanks!
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April 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this was good and finally u updated!! please update soon!
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April 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is a really good story. I love the concept and the characterization. The only thing you might wanna work on is punctuation and spacing. Like in Chapter Two. The entire thing is bunched together in one long paragraph, which makes it difficult for the reader to keep track of where they are. Have you thought of getting a beta? There are bunches of us just waiting for stories over on http://groups.yahoo.com/group/AFFBetaReaders . We're always looking for stories. You might wanna think about it.
Other than that, excellent job! I love it!
**Zeph**
Other than that, excellent job! I love it!
**Zeph**
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April 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter, though I noticed a blooper. After Inuyasha has tied his hands and is riding him, you wrote that Sess grabbed his hips. Afterwards Inuyasha untied his hands. You need to fix that inconsistincy. Other then that the chapter was VERY HOT and really good.