rate_review Reviews

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

Not to bad for a first story. But I think you could put a little more narve ave and detail into it. That alone would make the chapters longer, and more interesting to read. As they are now, they are mainly just the conversations. I also noticed some spelling and grammer mistakes.
But keep going, I think this could be a great story with just a little more work.

First one huh? You should make chapters longer and add more detail... other than that, instinsting start, sadly though i must say i don't have high hopes for this one but i'll check it from time to time as it proceeds and tell you more then.

i like it please wrote soon