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October 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
The only mistake that i saw was the mispelling of Inuy's s's sword, but hey i can't even spell. So it doesn't really matter. But your story is good and i can't wait to read
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October 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
The only thing that bothered me about your story is calling Tetsusiga Tensiaga (I can't spell anyway....sorry) Tensiaga is Sesshomaru's sword...but other than that I like your story and hope you add another chapter soon! And that kiss...heh that otta be good!
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October 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I would suggest breaking up the one big paragraph into many smaller paragraphs. Have the story all bunched up like that is hard to read.