rate_review Reviews

oh no u dont...!!! dont u dare fuck up a good story uv got it going really good great plot and everything dont u fucking dare turn kagome into a slut an let her get with sess...!!! dont u fucking dare do it he has tensauga! i mean come on! i alrdy feel this thats what ur gona do an to top it all off there gona become mates or somthing an ur gona ruin this story! dont do it! if u do that this story isnt gona be good anymore..

Meh. It didn't really catch my interest until the third chapter. I think the lack of dialogue in the first chapter made it a bit boring. Otherwise, not too shabby. Next time, mix a bit of sexual tension in with your angst (or even lemon) and your Constant Readers will most likely eat it up. Good attempt. Keep it up!