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person sly
schedule February 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
UPDATE
person sheana
schedule February 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i think you fic is really good so far. i hope u update again soon. i have just one suggestion though when u are talking with the charackters try to define who is talking i found it a little confusing when i was reading but other than that it is really good
person essie
schedule February 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
update
person Netealia Foxwood
schedule February 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
you should post on mediaminer.org you would get more reviews since more people read off that sit. but your story is good and i know that its nice to get reviews but you should write because you want to not becasue others want you too. It just work out better that way, for your story and for the people reading it.
person sky
schedule February 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Update soon please
person Anon
schedule February 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
update
person gv
schedule February 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
comon dont leave me with that!!! whats gonan happen to sota!!!!!!!!! gwaaa please update!!!
person gv
schedule February 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
im dont mean to be scary i am just....passionate......yea thats the word....passionate....im a theater major so i tend to be alittle bit extreme. but i really do love this story...i honestly didnt think i was gonna at first, but then i got into it...YOU SUCKED ME IN!!
so thats why i ask that you always update as soon as possible
*quietly* thanks
ja ne
person Molly Kesler
schedule February 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was a little freaky but pretty good for the most part. I'm not criticizing but your spelling could use a little work, no offense, 'kay? If you could like, somehow make them "escape" Naraku and her mom date Sesshomaru, that would be pretty funny. Hope you take some of my suggestions.

Sincerely,


Molly

P.S. Could you please put Sango in there a little more? T.T.F.N.," Ta Ta For Now"
person Angel
schedule February 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
awsome story!!!!!! this is my first ever review i totally love ur story update sooon

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