rate_review Reviews

I read both chapters, they are really good. Why did you stop writing? You have a good story here to finish telling. Are you going to write more?

good story! u have to keep writing!!!! update soon! must kno wat happens to them!! AHHHH!! PLEASE!!! *begs* plz update soon! ok well good story again! bye!!

Why?! why are your chapters so small? it's a good story line to be sure, but your chapters are minor and short! try to write longer chapters! sorry for my impudent manner, i have no means of offending! but i do like your story so far! keep writing! update soon i will be looking forward to it! ~.^

Actually, you're story isn't half bad! Even though I'm doing a story with Kagome and Inuyasha, I'm not a kagome fan. I have always liked kikyo a little more, because she isn't so whiny. But, that's personal preference. As for the length of your story, I would suggest writing at least 5 or 6 pages in microsoft word. That's how long mine was, and it's still only considered medium length (frustrating). I'll look for more.

Why are authors on AFF content to write shorts. This is a good form. A good story idea. Yet poorly executed, simply because it ends on in a terrible manner. I like what I read, but it's not nearly enough. I'll keep reading, it does interest me, but with chapters this short, my attention to it is sure to be fleeting.