rate_review Reviews

i love this story!
i read it some time ago but can't stop
u must keep writing
please!!!
(puppy dog eyes)

wow that was great!!! keep up the good work. the chapter was a bit long but it was really good. a few weak points though.

You have a pretty good beginning. I can picture most everything in my mind and your descriptors though weak in some areas were, for the most part, effective. I'd suggest working a little more on character development and setting the scene. You have a good grasp on the theme and it was a very well-written chapter. Hoping you update soon. EK!