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November 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I'm sad. Such a short chapter. Update soon please.
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November 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ya i like the 2nd chapter better!!!! really good
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November 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
MAKE ANOTHER CHAPTER PLEASE
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November 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You need to add another chap to this...and fast! I'll go into a withdrawl if you don't!
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November 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Update soon! I want to find out what happens and longer chaps. please.
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November 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like it. The plot sounds good. Maybe double check the grammer. Sorry, I have a tendency to try and correct
everything. But, please keep up the good work. And key term- UPDATE SOON!!!!!!
everything. But, please keep up the good work. And key term- UPDATE SOON!!!!!!
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November 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well you have a good start, but you had a couple typos and some grammar errors. Also, you forgot to capitalize Rin's name (I think it was only once though ^^) Other than that, good job!
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November 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Okay, I didn't pay attention earlier. Anyways, you just have to capitalize your characters' names and maybe go through spell check.
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November 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well let's see how you do with the next chapter....I'll write a better review then...
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November 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hi