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February 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It was decent. You rushed way too quickly, and your grammar needs some work, but the idea is somewhat original.
By rushed, I mean the lemon only lasted for one paragraph, and that was only two sentences long. The entire story transitioned poorly from one scene to the next, there wasn't a lot of detail, and the spelling could really use some work.
Just some creative criticism.
By rushed, I mean the lemon only lasted for one paragraph, and that was only two sentences long. The entire story transitioned poorly from one scene to the next, there wasn't a lot of detail, and the spelling could really use some work.
Just some creative criticism.
schedule
December 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
It's a great story, but you've put it in the wrong section. You've accidentally put it in the InuTaisho/Kagome section instead of the InuYasha/Kagome section.