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woo! :D I must say I think your writing gets better as it goes along. You've seemed to have got more into the story, you go into further depth with the small details that make all the difference. The looks the emotions, they've all become very pronounced and I really adore your story so far! I Hope you update soon.
Shigure-san
x chuu x

I know that Sesshomaru ruts with Inuyasha out of a sense of duty... but it's nice that he takes Inuyasha's comfort into consideration and is gentle with him. Mayhap in the future the lust will be fueled by love?

:)

Sesshoumaru by the time Inuyasha was done was apparently lower than dirt except dirt had more of a personality.
I doubt though that your brain will catch up to this fact before you freeze to death.”

I love those two lines!

Is Sessh like bi-polar? LOL

I guess Sess doesn't realize the full impact of his own actions either. He has made Inu a beta to him and now that Inu is acting like he should, because he is more of a demon now, Sess is acting like a child. He wants what he wants, but when it's giving to him or taken in Inu's case he doesn't know what to do with it.

there goes my life but i must say it. sesshou can be such an idiot. he says inu is ungrateful but does he ever try to look at inu's pov. heck no! idiot, self-absorbed prick is just gonna make things worse b/c he can't realize that his contrary ways r part of the problem. take a clue. i'm not saying that inu doesn't have his faults but jeez sesshou can be quite childish himself. i'm gonna stop my rant now since i've hit a few sore points and my life is probably in danger. oh! by the way nice writing vyperbites can't wait for more. n if sesshou is lookin for me tell him i live in alaska. don't know y but i do. k thanks. ttyl! *if i'm alive*

I just started reading this and it was only 7 chapters looked today and it was more I was so happy. This is the best original story I have read in a while.

Thank you, waiting for more

This is the way it should be and could always be if Sesshoumaru would just Inuyasha a little bit of kindness. He wanted to train Inuyasha before he took him back to his home and the elders. With the way he has just made love to him as Inuyasha asked him to there was no fighting, insulting or even hatred between them. All he has to do is take that and apply it to how he treats Inuyasha the rest of the time. He needs to be trained on why his demon side is being more cooperative with him. Teach him all of the things that Inuyasha should have known had he "taken on all his father responsilities".

Think beta

*glomps and noms your head* That made so much more sense and was a lot easier to follow. ^-^ I can't help but wonder just how Sesshoumaru will free Inu Yasha. I can't wait! I'm sure it's going to be good. *wiggles excitedly*

I love this story to pieces, but it gets a tad confusing at times. It would be nice if you would put lines between breaks. Like, when it goes from a hallucination to reality put a dotted line in between those paragraphs if your transition permits it. *scratches head* I hope that makes sense. If not, I'm sorry. I fail at describing things. ^^;