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Reviews for Spring fertility festival

By : jeffshelton

From ANON - aaaaa on September 03, 2005
this story is too complex .. its too hard to follow im having a tuff time doing it an .. wrll the story line/plot is kinda crap not much of a good story.. try writing the story but simpler.. i mean you add so much stuff... anyway i would refinse it an repost it see how that works
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From ANON - Millinea 20 on August 30, 2004
This story is the third best to all 105 pages.YOU THE THE BOMB.
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From ANON - faye on April 05, 2004
i loved this story. the fact that you actually looked up the dances and history provided a depth and realisticness that not many other stories achieve. i also must applaud you. it takes much courage to write about the sex orgies and particularly the mass abortions. not many writers have enough balls to do it. personally i thank you for doing it. somebody needed to. i also appreciate the pointing out that inuyasha can't immediately smell she's pregnant. its one of my irks and rather cliche-ish now so more and more people are using it. also the awesome sex thing when they are supposed to be virgins. the first time for even non virgins tend to be awkward. there are so many other things you did right with this story i could go on for ages. you can bee i e i will read all your other stories.
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From ANON - StormAZ on October 23, 2003
Just founds sts story. Wonderfully put together. I actually enjoyed the historical element of the story a great deal. I'm sorry you had troubles from some "feminist". As a female, I tend to ... piss them off? a bit. As I see nothing wrong with a woman staying home and raising a famind lnd letting a man BE a man instead of some ... mentally castrated clone that most of them seem to want to turn the male populace into. My beliefs in "equal rights" stop at: if I'm doing the same job as well (or better) I want the same wages. :::forces herself to step off her portable soapbox::: Sorry, I know I get a bit mouthy on that one.

The story was wonderful, the links informative and I'll be back later today or tomorrow to read the others you mentioned ^_^ But right now it's OMG in the morning (after 3am) and the kids are gonna try and wake me up in a couple of hours! Oh, and I know I messed with the email, but I'm tired of the "bots" picking up my email and sending me things that are worse than trash. Take out the extra @ and it's .com if you wto eto email me.
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From ANON - Xellas M. on October 12, 2003
What I liked about this story: you wrote Kagaome and especially Sango as real people, making difficult choices under the conditions as they were at the time - NOT ideal for women (call it an understatement). Their respective thoughts contemplating abortion felt very real, although I'm biased because I believe Sango made the mature choice given how often she is fighting for her life (Being a working Mom is one thing - hell, I'm one - but it isn't fair to a baby if you're risking your life. They need you and they come first.) I don't think I've *ever* seen a character making that choice in a fanfic before - I really commend you for going there!

I very much enjoyed the bits and pieces of mythology you wove together...they were really well done.

A few minor gripes: Very few, actually and very minor. When you first began using old formal address (thee, thy, etc.), you used them incorrectly, which was distracting. It got better by the last chapters though. Secondly, when Kagome and Inuyasha first have sex, she has him penetrate her anally. Without lube, she'd be in some very serious pain - not any kind of pain/pleasure mix - and the way you wrote the encounter, she'd probably be bleeding as well.
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From ANON - Elisa on September 22, 2003
I love this fic sooo much. I love all the sex that was in it. Kagome should had gotten pregnant. Hope u make more fics like this one. I give it 2 thubs up all the way
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From ANON - Lex on September 19, 2003
~Jeffs~
I did not find the story in any way offensive. The anime never touches on the lifestyles of feudal Japan and therefore never really gives a clear picture or understandings for the facts in stories as your and others I have read. But I have one question, birtbirth control pill that Kagome talks about, in another story, (Sailor Moon genre) talked about the pill not begining legalized for years until recently and was passed to different committees all the time. So would Kagome evave ave the Brith control pills as an option? or were they already legalized by time the story took place?
Keep writing, i like authors that try to put a new perspective on story lines.

Lex
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From ANON - Stayingput29 on September 16, 2003
Hey Jeff (waves) New fan here... LOL... I just started reading this fic and have to stop on chapter three... But so love it... I have laughed all the way through so far.... Poor Inuyasha....LMAO... But anyway just wanted you to know that I was here and I plan on returning to catch up on the rest of the Chaps can't wait really, but it is late and I must get my rest... But thanks for sharing and I will post another review when I read more....... Oh yeah i think that it is informative also and plan on checking out the wed sites you posted...... thanks....... Mules
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From ANON - hakuryuu on September 15, 2003
Just... awesome. Your whole fic... but I really like all the historically accurate details you gave!!! They just made the story come to life... and the way you coupled it with the In-characterness... awesome! I'm off to read some of your other stuff now!
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From ANON - Meiu on September 15, 2003
Well... I've been reading this story ever since you started it, Jeffs. And I can't see why people would complain. The thought of all the work you willingly put into this is amazing, and you have my utmost respect. While I haven't reviewed before, I've just been in awe of how well written you made this.

InuYasha wasn't so completely out of character as you think. At times, in the anim�, he does occasionally listen, and will explain things to Kagome, and usually, only Kagome. Yes, he can be curse-happy, but he castensten, if he needs to. Or if it suits him. Either one stands.

Kagome went through quite a lot. At first, she did not want to be pregnant, but by the end, she was depressed because she wasn't. After Naraku is finished, I can see her settling to be a docile housewife, though occasionally using 'sit' on InuYasha, just to keep him in line.

At first, it took me a little while, to see what made Miroku tick. Here, he finally had the chance to see the child he had been asking so many women to bear, and instead, it was Sango. As much as he tried to make her change her mind, she stood adtly tly by her decision, though it hurt them both.

Perhaps, since Sango is possibly my favorite character in the series, I felt I could relate to her best. She wouldn't have minded bearing Miroku's child, but it was simply wasn't the best time, for either of them. To bring a child up, with so many risks, she couldn't stand the thought of losing both her child, and the houshi, since they are both so very important to her. And everything is uncertain...

This review has turned out to be a lot longer than I initially planned. I'll cut it here. There's more to say, but I'll leave it for some other time.

If you're ever in need of a beta-reader, think of me. I'll read over anything.
+ Meiu (here)
- Sanity through Madness (FF.N)
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From ANON - Mija on September 15, 2003
All I can say is this fic from begining to end tot totally awsome..I wouldnt have changed a think even if I had wanted to, it was soo full of detail, yet true to the charactors..I luved it..and I think your writing is awsome, will try to check out some of your other fics as well they sound pretty damn good to me..lol..soo again ty for one awsome story and keep up your writing its soo darn good..:-) much huggs and smiles Mija..:-)
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From ANON - lere on September 15, 2003
Well, your story have an odd effect on me. I think the positive point is the information about sex and birth control. I hope many people get the information and go look for more. My sister is young and a single mother, her baby comes when she was 15, so I know how difficult is that situation.

And because the experience with my sister I must desagree about Kaede making the decision. You see, my sister is a smart girl and she also knew about sex and birth control, yet she became pregnant. But she wanted her baby and despite the hard life she put herself into, she is a fantastic mother and my nephew, a wonderful five years old boy, is the most important person in hefe afe and our family. The father didn't want him and my nephew doesn't know him. But he is a very happy little boy and I'm sure he feels our love for him.

So I just want to say that I don't agree about other people making the decision about how you must lead your life, body and the path you must take. If the caracter, Kagome, wanted the baby and her family support her decision, I don't see excuses for Kaede act, despite her good intentions.

Well, although my disccord I really liked the story and maby a sequel could make me happy.

Hugs from Brazil
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From ANON - Babsie on September 15, 2003
Okey
This was a very plausible end.
I think that they really act as their personalities.
I enjoy very much read this story, but i�m one of the readers that bug you with the ending hun?
well...to my optimistic way to see it... there are a happy end because nobody doubts that they will kill Naraku...so...in the far end...they stay together ..hehehehe :-)
You are a very good writer.
I already read your other stories...and I LOVE the day after proposal :-)
Keep writing. I can�t wait to see what will happen in Kyoto.

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From ANON - hakuryuu on September 13, 2003
Awesome! I"d be glad to send you a spell/grammar checked version, but it might take a while... ;) keep it up! I can't wait to read the end!
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From ANON - EFS on September 12, 2003
Honestly... I found the strathrather interesting in the earlier chapters which got me reading, but the attitude portrayed regarding orgies and abortions as a solution simply sickened me. A cultural festival is one thing. Endangering the lives of young women by pressing abortions on them is one of the most disgusting, ANTI femist pracices ever to happen! I know that you are entitled to your opinions on matters and I know that there is some historical basis for abortions, but the whole attitude towards them, and towards pressuring young women into having sex before they're married is VERY disturbing. I somehow find it hard to believe that anyone could do such horrible things to anyone else. In spite of only reading enough of the end to try to see if there was any redeeming value, this story has made me literally sick to te stomach. I am sorry if this comes across as a closed-minded flame, but I honestly feel too sickened to make it any less negative.

And you used 'then' when you're supposed to use 'than' Learn the difference
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