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By : kimisan

From ANON - sendosha on November 02, 2005
*snicker* Have to agree with Ryukotsusei. Please just don�t kill Hiei, not by Moryomaru (he has the ugliest lips I�ve ever seen). Even if you have already decided the pairing I vote for Yomi/Kagome/Yusuke, it would make sense and Yomi is hot, nearly as hot as Hiei. This fic is definitely your best beside Two swords one heart. Congratulations!
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From ANON - Ryukotsusei on November 02, 2005
ARGHHHH!!! Not my Hiei!! *Runs and drags him out of the fight* MINE! Alrighty then! Down to business. Kurama is lucky that is was Kagome that hit him and not Shura or Lydon. Lydon would have likely just melted him and Shura would have more than likely pummeled him to an inch of his life. At least now they know that she had nothing to do with believing her dead. That'll teach Kurama to call her a bitch. I like the set up that you have going here, still hoping for a triangle. I think you could pull it off with a few plot twists :) Nice introduction to the bad guy, Kagome's going to need to be careful. The stress of knowing he is alive might be the final touches on throwing her into premature labor. Very true about the author's note. If Yomi is considered old then Kurama has to be considered ancient. It doesn't matter if this body of his isn't that old. Good chapter, I look forward to the next one. Update soon please.
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From ANON - Kage Otome on November 02, 2005
I love this! What an unexpected twist, Mouyoumaru (did I spell that right?) *shrugs* Ah the conflict! I wonder, does Kagome fight at all? Will she help Hiei if he loses and is absorbed or close to being absorbed, or will Hiei step out willingly...Update soon!
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From ANON - BananaFlavoredEskimo on November 02, 2005
This is one of my favorite fics at the moment. I love it. You're a gifted writer and i thank you for writing this. It makes me happy. Oh so happy. I less than 3 this story!!!!
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From ANON - mercy d on November 02, 2005
hey i really love the yomi twist altho i like yusuke kagome seems seems to be great with yomi and shes havin a kid with him so i wud be odd to see her fall for yusuke if it happens i like that pairing uve got a great number og opinions for meetings between everyone and lydon sounds really great lol kinda like yusuke shura pretty cool to update soon plz ja ne
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From ANON - Kage Otome on November 02, 2005
I love this! Lydon is strong isn't he! Did I get his name right? Ugh. So early in the morning...Anyway, keep up the good work! I think a Yomi/Kagome/Yusuke would be great, still. I absolutely adore Yomi's character.
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From ANON - Anon on November 02, 2005
can't wait dor more
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From MFleetwood24 on November 02, 2005
I really like this story alot and while yes the feeling between Yusuke and Kagome were awesom and I like the way you portrayed their relationship I think that she should end up with Heie! I know bad mfleetwood24 but I can't help but love the pairing! I think that he should be taken down a peg by her but not too much. I like the chemistry between her and Yomi as well but if you don't want her with heie then have her with Kurama because I don't think that Yomi is as suited to her personality as Kurama is. NE ways it's your fic your inspirations will guide you! Hope to see an update soon!
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From ANON - Anon on November 02, 2005
i say have it end in kag and yuske and yomi
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From ANON - swasdiva on November 01, 2005
Strike that, I'm not quite done.

My personal vote as it stands? Kagome/Yomi (I do love Kagome/Yusuke, but I think I'm inclined to agree that at this point, they may have passed their prime).
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From ANON - swasdiva on November 01, 2005
Good lord, I love this story. I love it. Want to marry it. Have its children, as if there aren't enough random children running around!!!!! But aside from that, here's my two cents on the dreaded Kagome/?? pairing fiasco. I think what you've done so far is not only creative and engaging, but it is a believable turn of events. It's been four friggin' years; it only makes sense that Kagome would've moved on with Yomi and that they would've formed a family unit, thus her having his child. Makes perfect sense and honestly, feels very right. I never would've thought of Kagome/Yomi as a pairing but it works extremely well the way you've written it. They complement each other in a mature, deeply nurturing way. I don't think you should dismissively break them apart just to apease fans, BUT....here's the huge, enormous, needs-to-invest-in-weight-watcher's-BUT: I don't think you should give up on Kagome/Yusuke, either.

Here's the thing. As of now, this story has progressed at a steady pace, and natural turns and twists have gotten us where we are. Thus, it will just require more turns and twists to get Yusuke and Kagome back together. Maybe another 7-8 chapters. Make it angsty! Make it epic! This is a tournament after all, where tragic accidents can happen even to the most powerful youkai *cough, cough, hint, hint*. People have already made threatening overtures towards Kagome and the other humans, so there's potential conflict right there. Depending on what angle you want to take the drama, you could further explore Yomi's change as a character by posing him with this choice: which is more important, winning rights as Makai king, or sacrificing everything for the ones you love? Hmm...see? There's so much angst potential! Not that I want to see any harm come to our beloved characters, but if Yusuke/Kagome is going to prevail, I personally think there must be some tragedy involved to make the transition believable. Of course you are the writer, and you have a masterful handle on the epic angst as it's progressed thus far, so I know you'll creatively pull something shocking out of your tukus and make us all swoon again in the face of your amazing skillz!!

And now that my pompous diatribe is finally finito, I say good day.
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From ANON - Aibu on November 01, 2005
awwwwwww! I was so happy at first when i saw that it was gonna be a Yu/Kag. But now i want it to be a Yomi/Kag. Good job at stwiching my standerds around (that's no easy feat.....i'm more stubborn than a mule). I definitely want it to be a Yomi/Kag!
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From ANON - Gin on November 01, 2005
Yomi/Kag
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From ANON - Ume on November 01, 2005
OHMYGOD!!!!! SO GOOD!!!!!!!!! Please of please make it a yomi/Kag. There isn't enough of them!
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From ANON - Shadowed on November 01, 2005
It is going very well. Concerning the pairings, I must admit that I do feel bad for Yusuke; however, I would rather Kagome to end up with Yomi. Yusuke has gone through many hardships, but so has Kagome as well as Yomi. If one wanted to feel indiferent about Yusuke's situation, one can always mention that he 'had it coming'; however, it is my belief that if you were to just leave Yusuke as he is now then the story will not flow as well as it possibley could. The happiness of others must also be taken into account. Kagome is finally happy with Yomi, and she is expecting his child soon. If you were to tear those two apart, Kagome might suffer from depression. She has gone through so much heartache and it doesn't seem right to make her suffer some more. Though Yomi doesn't admit it yet, he has found happiness with Kagome. He loves her dearly. Seperating them will make Yomi into someone even worse than he was before. Shura's feelings are also important. Kagome is his mother now. What would happen to Yomi would also happen to Shura. And then there is Lydon. He loves Yomi like a father. Yomi is the male figure he looks up to, and seperating him for Yomi could cause serious problems in the future. Despite how small of a character he has become, Shippo's feelings are also very important. He has watched Kagome go through so much. I have come to the impression that his happiness depends only on Kagome's happiness. If Kagome was to be thrown into the pain of heartbreak once more, Shippo would also feel pain. Watching Kagome go through so much pain due to love, it wouldn't be surprising if Shippo would be reluctant to love in the future. Watching Kagome's heartbreak again, might make him never want to love another. Kurama is a character I no longer consider a leading contender. I do care about Kurama's feelings, but my impression was only attraction and lust from him. Not a very good choice at all. What ever you chose to do please keep in mind how it will effect the main characters: Kagome, Lydon, Shippo, Shura, Yomi, and Yusuke. Please update soon. I am anxious to see how things will play out.
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