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From Archfiend on June 21, 2008
Kagome`s grandfather sure can be grumpy can`t he. What I foun was really interestin, that in the first chpters a nearly frugal lifestyle of Inuyasha`s was established and now we see him casually going to a jeweller and buying diamond andplatinum rings, plus his habit of importing clothing. It shows Inuyasha in a completely different light. I also liked the situation with miroku starting to lose all colour, just think a woman even hornier and more lecherous than the monk;) The way Miroku is turning out is quite nice, though the funny thing is that both seem to know who they want, yet both are too scared to admit it. Should have some nice and funny consequences. I`m looking forward, when Inuyasha and Kagome are to be presented to The Nishimori family and how Jisab will react to seein a full Taiyoukai
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From Archfiend on June 20, 2008
Yay, at long last Rin enters the scene. I must confess that I have something for that little girl, she is just so heart-warming. The funny thing though in this chapter was Sesshoumaru being a nice guy( well relatively seen) with the taking up of the wardage of Rin , and then he`s an absolute bastard telling Kagome about her engagement to inuyasha, when he hasn`t even proposed to her. Either he just assumed he already had, due to the fact they are lovers,or he just wanted to be a bit of a bastard, full well knowing that he`d enrage his brother. I like to see Miroku`s and Sango`s relationship seems to be gathering up speed. I also just adore those talk Sango has with Krara, very nice. I have one complaint though. Sesshoumaru mentioned he wanted to speak to both Inuyasha and Kaome in private, though he only spoke to Inuyasha, thereby omitting Kagome, if I`m not mistaken. I know you cannot change the story, as it has already been written far, far ahead (though I haven`t peeked I promise. I rely an you posting one chapter after another here on aff)yet still I wonder what happened there . Ok see you next chapter
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From zianeu on June 19, 2008
Sorry I've been too rushed lately to be anything more than a passive reader. That doesn't mean I haven't been loving the story in my spare time. This is quickly becoming one of my favorite AUs. I like how you've worked the Wolf-clans into the story, although I still wonder how demons work with the rest of society in general... Of course the X-men get on pretty well with arguably 'superior' beings being run into hiding, so it could be somewhat similar here with the 'superior' yet less populous demon stock just trying to fade in and using their advantages where they could on the sly, more or less.
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From Archfiend on June 19, 2008
Whoa, what an entrance by Sesshoumaru. You certainly were not kidding when you said he`d enter the sscene soon.I am not sure, but I think that Inuyasha and Kouga are both Representatives of different way of live, with Koua the more archaic, primal way, pure youkai if you so want and Inuyasha a more sophisticated way of life 8the civilized human way? Wait something`s wrong there humans are not civilized, ah the civilize hanyou way of life) Finally Inuyasha get`s to know about his demon blood, though I stll find it funny, that Kagome can bring his blood to boil and calm his blood, very useful isn`t she. (Sorry, somehow I`m just too sarcastic today) You elevated Sesshoumaru in Status did you not in comparison to the manga, as he is now the Taiyoukai of the whole of Japan and not only the western lands. He also seemed to have a sense of humor. Wait Sesshoumaru and humor,paradoxon.Otherwise the chapter was very informative, as it also brought a few more information on Inuyasha`s family, not to mention the entrace of Myouga and Totousai. I liked the idea though that Myouga would wait until the casette recorder had been invented, so he could sed Sesshoumaru a message, without the fear of being killed.
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From Archfiend on June 18, 2008
I am already very sad, as the scanlations for the last chapter Inuyasha have come out, after more than 10 years, Inuyasha has finally finished. Sob. On to your story though. Kagome`s family do favour a direct approach in getting things done. I�m surprised at how much Souta actually saw and understood. I couldn`t help but laugh over Miroku, I mean he had tried so hard and then this, poor guy he really seems to be a bit cursed ;). Oh and Inuyasha seems to be rather traditional doesn`t he, meaning that he will have to present Kagome to Sesshoumaru, and if he`s anything like the Sesshoumaru we know and like, this could be quite violent. Surporisingly short review for a long chapter, though as the title suggest not much new (except the groping and Inuyasha`s intentions to oneday marry Kagome)
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From Darknessdawns on June 17, 2008
....Wow, what a chapter. So many things came to the forfront all at the same time. I really do like this chapter too. It seams to have kicked things up a notch and is more than likely the turning point in the story. This chapter was wonderful for strengtening the characters and plot. I just cant wait till the next chapter, but I need sleep and will read it from here when you post it. Anyway this chapter was wonderfully written and had no typos or any mistake dthat I could see at all. I hope the rest of the story is as good as this chapter or better. With your writting it probably is. And as always, keep up the great work.

p.s.
I love how you used that kiss to calm down our favorite hanyou.
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From Archfiend on June 17, 2008
Wham! What an explosion, now that was a chapter. Extremely action packed, and also some very nice developments.Though I laughed really hard when Kagome had to answer these female ookami youkai,it sees that girls will be girls no matter what species they are, hn? I am a bit concerned about Inuyasha and his demon blood though, I mean he apparently knows that his Tessaiga is important to him in some way, so I hope he`ll soon notice what Tessaiga is there for. I am a bit disappointed in Miroku, letting himself be overpowered by Kouga just like that. I may be a bit of a fool, though I get the feeling that Kagome`s mother is slowly but surely trying to coax Kagome into living with Inuyasha. It also seems as though Kouga is the main antagonist as can be seen so far. You also portray a side of him that is far more vicious in a way than in the manga, then as I caught it, he openly speaks of kidnapping her and raping her in order to hurt Inuyasha. Ginta and Hakakku though were something of a joke, loyal to the core to Kougaa, with obvious contempt for human yet blundering about and messing things up, what a joke. Nice one there, while reading I couldn`t help but rolly my eyes at them.
P.S.: Just a question, but will we also see something of Sesshoumaru with Rin, I just like that pair it always make me chuckle?
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From ANON - Ruka, <3 on June 16, 2008
Woow, i love where the story is going,
and thanks for adding soo much chapters already ! :)
i read them all, cant wait for 18,
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From Archfiend on June 16, 2008
oy that`s not fair, posting tweo chapters at one, how am I supposed to review each then? Ok jokes byside.First of all I really have to congratulate on the way you depict Kaome`s mother. Although that woman only wants her daughter to be happy,I think she certainly has a wicked streak 8AS IN ROGUEISH; THE TEASING:::9 i ALSO LIKED THE SCENE IN WHICH mIROKU FINALLY REALIZED THAT READING AN ARTICLE THAT HAS COME UP IN THE SEARCH MIGHT PROVIDE HIM WITH INFORMATION; VERY FUNNY THAT ONE WASyOU HAVE ALSO BEGun to broaden the world it is set in(sorry for all the capital letters, mistake of mine, though I`m too lazy just now to correct this mistake) by not only introducing Kouga`s doja, but I also think, that this was the first scene in your entire story so far, which featured neither of one of the 4 main story characters, It`s finally growing, yay! I found it very interesting that until now, Inuyasha has displayed only a few youkai traits in behaviour, though now that he has has sex with Kagome his youkai blood seems to be much more active making him act also more of a youkai,which is also an indicator of who muh he loves Kagome as I think. Otherwise nicely written as always and even better was the language you used. High-class. Reading a story written in such high-class enlish reminds me why I love that language.

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From Darknessdawns on June 15, 2008
Yay, its the birthday chapter. Oooh lemon. Anyway I really enjoyed this chapter since we finally got to see what Kagome had planned. It was very well written as always. Also I loved how you also mentioned the problem with the groping on the trains. Not many americans know about that spacific problem. I'm glad that Sango scared all the would be gropers away. I don't know about you but that would definately ruin my birthday celebration. Oh and we got to see how understanding Kagome's Mom is yet again. She really reminds me of how my mom was.
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From Archfiend on June 15, 2008
Those were some harsh words you had for me, I do feel a bit misunderstood. Nonetheless the story.Well..., the first lemon scene in this story and a very nice one as it is. The description had a nice balance between aggression (Kagome initiating many moves)and slowing down the pace (the tenderness an love from htese two), and I must confess I felt a smile when you wrote that Kagome actually wore the outfit she had been iven prior, even thouh it had shocke before, nice twist that one. It was also interesting that Kagome as soon as she ws an instructor could not wait to give herself aa birthday present and Inuyasha a very nice memory.. Other than thatnothing much seemed to happen, making it a rather relaxing sort of chapter, though I found the idea of Sango glaring at potential leechers on the train hilairious, now that was a nice comical point of relief in the style of the manga, too bad she didn`t have Hiraikotsu with her;)
P.S.: I never assumed the man taking care of Kirara was a youkai
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From Archfiend on June 15, 2008
I remember how you said that Youkai and Hanyou lived in the middle of the humans, yet now you display the ookami youkai as being pretty archaic and somewhat animalistic. Although I understand that this`d be the way the< were raised, doesn`t it somewhat clash with the rules of the society the live in, and makes their existence far more obvious? I also do not understand something else. You mentioned Youkai living in the woods behind the dojo, with Inuyasha`s permission obviously seeing as it is hisproperty, though on the other hand you said that Inuyasha is not accepted by Youkai, so how does this fit?. I know that this may be seen as nit picking, yet these points seems to clash with some of the main story pillars. On the other hand I think I can now begin to understand the way you write you stories, and I must say to be able to insert something in a chapter an then let this particular object resurface tenn chapters later means that,there is very little room for spontaneous insertion in the story, but also means that you practically sketch out the whole story with many details before starting to write making you practically a professional author, which really shows and does wonders for your story.
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From Darknessdawns on June 15, 2008
I love the humor in this story. As always it is a wonderful story and well written also. I am currently reading this on both sites but leaving most of my reviews here. I just coulsn't wait to read the citrus and see what Kagome had planned. I can't wait until its posted here. Anyway just wanted to let you know that I am really enjoying it. I like to read a serious story evey once and a while. Keep up the good work.
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From ANON - Ruka, <3 on June 15, 2008
Heyy, OMG ! i love where the story is going.
and i love how in chapter 11 you had the slight coupling with InuYasha and Kagome.
It was genius.
And your FanFics, are soo great.
You are a great Author and should write more :)
i woudl read them all .
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From Archfiend on June 14, 2008
As to the humurous spots what I meant was as in the manga style, though your subtle humour also appeals greatly to me. This sort of humour though is far harder to implement, seeing as one needs great foresight to sow in the hints, but you manage admirably. Wher I was was really surprised was the explanation of Miroku`s name. Seeing the research done by you for this story leaves me wonder just how far along you planned when writing this story. I have a great amount of respect for your work. I liked the idea of some of the wolves of Kouga`s pack coming to train under Inuyasha, wonderful twist, it also shows what an unusual dojo Inuyasha leads. Your description of Kagome`s expectations and plans for her birthday made me think that Kagome really lived a life within a small group of people as does Sango, though the reasons are obviously of completely different nature. what I am really intrigued about was the concept of the three jewels that Mirokue taught about in his class at the end of the chapter and , this is pure speculation on my side actually, how theyy relate to the Shikon no Tama or does the hikon actually exist, for seeing as Naraku exists,and has alreay driven Kohaku mad and towards the slaying of his whole family, I wonder whether he is the Naraku we know and what hisgoals are. So I`m really looking forward to the next chapters. (Funny isn`t it how I drew an arc from Miroku`s lessons to naraku)
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