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From Vyper on November 19, 2010
I am glad Sesshoumaru clarified that Mongrel business. Now all he has to do is get Inuyasha to open up to him and soon they will find love in each other. At least I hope they will damn it all.
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From ANON - angelsword on November 19, 2010
By the way, I totally loved Pup, maybe we can meet shippo and rin as a playmate?
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From ANON - angelsword on November 19, 2010
Very nice save, I really didn't like sesshoumaru at the end of chapter 12, I agree with a reveiw above it was very abrupt, didn't really fit what he was saying about honour and how he had noted the demons young energy.

One thing to clear up I know you tend not to edit for NaNoWrMo but what did you mean by " "No young one, Demons of honor do not do that. We are upfront, we are just and we are dearly." Dearly? I'm sure thats not what you meant but I can't work out what else it would be. Usually I can work it out by what else is written, this time I can't.
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From ANON - river girl on November 19, 2010
I love it. Thank you for recognizing the power of a name. And you made me a tiny bit nervous about Sesshomoru at the end of chapter 12 but cleared it all up in chapter 13, even made him more eandering. I didn't miss that part about Beta either.

I can see Inuyasha having a bit of trouble in the future obeying all these new rules about how to speak off himself or even think of himself. I wonder how it will feel for him to actually answer to Inuyasha from a source outside of himself. He definately needs some training before he can keep up the manners of one of the Demon Lord's pack in public!

I love the tendernes, how Sesshomoru can't keep his hands to himself nor feels any desire to. Inuyasha needs a lot of petting! and cuddling, kissing of ears, ticking of feet, sniffing......hm....time to go track down something to cuddle. Obviously you've put my mind on a very dangerous track. I am now a danger to any free running puppy. ^_^

But seriously, good chapter. Cannot wait for the next one. These characters are staying strong and developing and it's a pleasure reading.
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From trystkinkou on November 19, 2010
hehehe.. now as intelligent as sesshie is he should be better able to piece together his 'interesting' happenings with pup and yasha. i can't wait to see how this will continue or how inuyasha and the others take the changes around them. thank you for sharing this.
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From ANON - Anon on November 18, 2010
soo cool :D i really like yasha but i loooove pup. anyway the story is amazing, keep going :D
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From ANON - Caitriona on November 17, 2010
Another lovely chapter. I will agree that I am rather glad that you didn't leave us at that particular cliffy-to-be. We would have been most vexed.

Sess's eager desire to either interact with Pup again or to have Inuyasha awaken was pretty cute. He was like a little boy waiting for Christmas.

I like Yasha. While he doesn't exactly seem the youkai personality of most fanfiction, I still found him intriguing. Each of the aspects seems to have their own physical manifestation and I find that interesting. Inu has his dark hair and eyes and his fragile humanity, Inuyasha has his puppy ears and mature being, Pup has his size and youthful vigor, and Yasha has his elfin ears and tail. I love moko-moko-sama as a tail, so I like Yasha having a tail, too. We own Golden Retrievers, so I can completely visualize the raised waving flag of a tail. On a side note, Sess trying to get the youkai aspect to try to explain how he 'worked' in relation to the other aspects was a lot of fun.

Yahsa is young and full of romanticized ideals, and I found his interaction with Sess very, well, puppy like. He is a young teenager who doesn't quite understand what the world is really about not what to do about it. I thought, while reading, of just how glad I was that someone like Manten didn't really get ahold of this aspect before Sess had a chance to step in. They would have used everything in him up and then thrown it away like yesterday's garbage. His solemn oath, given with all the majesty that a young child-man can bring to the table, had me smiling.

I will admit that I was a little disappointed in Sess. That his first inclination was something sexual with the young youkai, was a little off-putting. While I know and cherish future acts these two will undoubtedly participate in, this came across a little to abrupt. I know that you indicated that Yasha's frank, open face and eagerness is what made Sess think to try it, but it still seems to be a little abrupt when just a few paragraphs before you had him discussing the fact that he was a youkai of honor. Just my two cents.

Inuyasha's awakening and shutting away of the other three aspects in response to Sess's sexual encouragement was sweet. His will protect these sides of himself no matter what. His "deadness" and almost fatalistic view of things made me a little sad, though. Even here, where he should be able to be safe, he thinks of himself as nothing more than a thing to be used and abused. I hope Sess realizes what is going on.

Thanks for writing for us!! I'm looking forward to seeing how this scene plays out!
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From NAnderson on November 17, 2010
Wow, amazing! And here I was hoping to see him make the poor youngster blush and stutter XD lol. And while I admit to this being an evil cliffy where I am dieing to see what happens next with inuyashas offer... Im more hoping to see shess holding our little pup and cuddling him ^.^ But honestly Ill be happy with just about anything as soon as I see an update ;)
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From Vyper on November 17, 2010
I don't think that mongrel is a good word to use around Sesshoumaru. He will straighten that out though.
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From jdbbrz27 on November 17, 2010
whew that was well wow I love little yasha the demon so innocent and strong and so easily misled. Makes me wonder what will Sessh do now that he has to deal with the fully aware of the real world hanyou who has been through way to much pain in his very young life. Will Sessh be truly honorable or a comple letch and heal out to take advantage of the young Inuyasha oh let's be serious he didn't save Inuyasha just to scare him off right off by fucking the crap out of him but it should be interesting to see how Sesshomaru deals with this.
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From sadeness on November 16, 2010
Well, what can I say�
You�ve made me love NaNo.
To have you writing us such wonderful stories (I�ve been reading you for some time already), and having new chapters basically every day.
That really makes me Loove NaNo.
I LOOOOOVVVeeeee the story, InuYasha is so C.U.T.E.
And I LOOOOOOOVVVVVVVVVEEEEE you�
Please keep on writing and keep on NaNo.
Smacks.
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From ANON - varjo on November 16, 2010
Interesting, veeeery interesting... I can hardly wait to read more. Pup was so cute! I can hardly wait for Sesshy to meet Yasha, and how will Inuyasha explain pup to Sesshy...? Can hardly wait.

You write very well and I really like the characters. Hope you'll update soon, but I refuse to push or rush you, it'll only bring inferior results.
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From ANON - river girl on November 15, 2010
Cute, cute and more cute. I love Pup, he definately needs many, many hugs. Could Sesshemoru eventually get to do that? Pretty please? Thank you.

I loved the under the bed part. And Sesshemoru just keeps getting better and better. Thanks for the tibit on the background search. Will Inuyasha ever meet the rest of the family?

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From ANON - Caitriona on November 15, 2010
I'm completely confused as to just how Pup managed to physically manifest, but he is just so cute I could eat him for breakfast and I won't ask a lot of questions regarding the destruction and creation of matter within a living being.... I'm sure that Sess will have a lot of questions for Inuyasha when he does finally come out of his drug induced coma.

I liked the little back story on Jinenji and how he came to the court of Sess. It makes him a more rounded character. It also gives him a frame of reference to calm Inuyasha if he goes a little wonky on believing that Sess won't harm him.

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From jdbbrz27 on November 15, 2010
Aw I want pup can I take care of all of them oh wait that's Sesshomaru's job isn't it darn it all. I adore all the aspects to Inuyasha and the whole concept is so original god this story is really awesome. It's awesome that Sesshomaru is the only one outside of Inuyasha who has seen pup and talked to him I can not wait to see where else this story goes because it just gets more and more interesting every day. I hope you win this nano thing because this story deserves recognition.
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