Reviews for Must You Be So Difficult?By : GizmoTrinket |
Hello :)
I stumbled over your fic a few days ago and started reading. I already finished this chapter and tbh I really need a break, because... well... I'm kind of exhasuted and am not really sure, if I want to continue or not, so I decided I first want to leave you a review.
At first, your writing style is... special. I dont mean that in a negative way! But the problem I have is, that your writing is so chaotic, that most of time I didnt really get, what the plot really is about (and I can say, that my English is really good and I have read MUCH English FFs and with no one I had that difficulties like with yours). Most confusing is the bazillions of different kind of communicating, really, I hardly believe that I'm the only one who is completely overwhelmed by this. Why cant the characters speak just normal and use this Link-thingy just now and then? Besides that its really annoying and confusing to read, like I mentioned its really hard to get the plotline and while reading I constantly feel like I'm on an LSD-Trip.
Especially it also seems like Inu Yashas "Yokai" (besides, the reiki-form for demons is YOKI not Yokai) and he himself are two completely different people, which is also confusing.
I also dont like the way you portrayed Rin in this fic. For my personal taste, she has way too much presence in the story and in my opinion you have overdrawn her and she makes it hard for me as reader to focus on the Pairing of this fic. Which is bit disappointing. I prefer her as the normal little girl she is and I somehow dont really like her in your fic. To say it without sugarcoating: she is bugging me to death.
I also dont really get, what happened to Kagome. I read the part more than one time and still dont get it. Ok, WHAT I get is, that she went kind of crazy, but WHY?
I hope, my review doesnt sound too negative - there is something in your fic, that kept me reading till this chapter, bc you also had very intensive, emotional and deep parts, which really catched me. And thats the reason, why Im a bit torn to continue or not. tbh I hope a bit of Preggo Sessh scenes xD. But especially with my ADHD its very exhausting to follow the storyline with this insane chaos of punctuation marks and I felt really overwhelmed and exhausted and had to make many breaks (usually I swallow a nice fic in mostly one rush)
I think, I will let settle the whole thing and decide in a few days if I continue or not.
Greetings
Lychee
Please write more soon!!!
Awesome chapter. I can't wait to see what Inukimi is going to do now that she is alone with inuyasha
The story is getting so interesting. Please continue!
Awesome chapter. I hope sesshomaru mother wouldn't hurt shippo
Very interesting. DIdn't bother to read those codes they were to boring. Story kicks ass. let me know when theres an update. I enjoyed how you manipulated the characters. Hope you don't lose interest or get to busy & forget this story.
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