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January 23, 2017 at 12:00 AM
Pretty cool! I think you're aiming for premise similar to the 4th InuYasha movie, "Fire on Mystic Island." Technical notes: good grammar and spelling, fluid sentence structure.
Suggestion: ending a chapter on a question is a technique used for dramatic and ironic effect, one I like to use myself. However, I think that the way you worded the last line needs some improvement. I think it's too long in its current form. In my mind, "Have you ever heard of the Disappearing Isle?" works better, though this is only a suggestion, as you may find a superior solution on your own. Thank you for writing!