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Reviews for The Great Trial

By : WinterDovane

From itstartedwithapaopu on January 05, 2012
I love you.

I love you, and I love this, and I love love love how you write them. Their relationship is perfect. ruiga;odbja;dfj I cannot wait until your next chapter!

Also, it gave me the warmfuzzies when I read that you sit down with my last review as you plot; writer to writer, that means a lot to me (it also makes me feel like a badass, but you know). I can't wait to see what happens next!! Agh, I'm so stressed out!!
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From ANON - c-loke on January 05, 2012
awesome post! Sesshoumaru seems like he wants very much to keep his brother close. and the story about the past was sad but truly insightful. you get to see a Sesshoumaru that did care for his family, even adored his step mom. :) which is so a PLUS! lol Can't wait for more.
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From ajj77sunhawk on January 04, 2012
Am nominating this fic for awards hope you dont mind :)
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From Vyper on January 02, 2012
I so love it when Sesshoumaru holds Inuyasha's hand. It is so damn cute and Inuyasha is really finding himself attracted to Sesshoumaru. I just can't wait to have Sesshoumaru aliviate that Heat of Inuyasha's. I hope that Inuyasha will be the uke this time.
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From ajj77sunhawk on January 02, 2012
i wrote a long review that go eaten by the comp. am now lazt. Great fic... *pouts!!!!! dumb review munching comp....
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From ANON - darkenedangel on January 02, 2012
*cleans up giant puddle of drool* that hotspring sceen was very nice... and im so glad i gave you ideas for the next chapter... which is comming soon right? *pokes with stick* right? i hope so and poor shippou... i wish u didnt use him as bait... hes so cute.... hmmm... maybe some shippou kouga love?.... hmmm wouldnt there kids be freaking presious... sorry im ramblihg had 2 many energy drinks to day well happy new years oh PLEASE UPDATE SOON
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From ANON - darkendangel on December 22, 2011
Your story is amazing... its really addicting. i think that Xin's kids should take Sesshomaru's lecture 2 heart, i also think Kouga and Shippo should have permiment roles in the story ya no to keep Inuyasha happy it will give him a fimilar face 2 bond with while he's at the castle... as to what im expecting... im expecting the Inu bros to stumble across the army while Inuyashas in heat... and Sesshomaru to have to mate with him mark him and everything.... wont that show his mom ^.^ and if you do bring in Sango and Mirroku id say they'd have 2 or 3 young kids and maybe another on the way
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From Kuragari75 on December 20, 2011
*jaw drops* that was somehow astonishing, erotic, and emotionally taxing all at the same time. I am very impressed! and that was a fantastic chapter as well as the last one since I had to catch up. lol you're writing is fantastic and I really enjoyed watching the relationship with the brother's evolve through that ordeal. It's not over yet though and i can't wait to read more and see where this goes!!!
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From Kobanya on December 20, 2011
I think letting Sango & Miroku show up is up to you. All I have to suggest is if you do, make sure too much focus isn't put on them. Same thing with Kouga and Shippo. As for kids, I definitely think so, but again, not too much focus on them. I really, really hope that Xin's children can come around. However, I feel that with the personalities you gave them that if Xin is to be the one to change their minds, then he'll have to apply a different method for each of them. Probably the son would have to fight Sesshomaru (at Xin's suggestion/manipulation) in order to learn anything, while I think the daughter could come around given some time and seeing how Sesshomaru rules. As for the last question, that all depends on whether it's a temporary or permanent break. If it's the latter, then no way! :P In the case of the former, I could see Inuyasha's feelings on the matter causing problems for the intimacy to continue. He's still going through a lot of things from the Trial, not to mention the troubling events from that dragon asshole. So going forward in his new relationship with Sesshomaru could cause problems and he could be going into it for all the wrong reasons. So I could see the need for him to step back and really think about what he wants to do with his life and where he truly stands with Sesshomaru. I don't know how long you plan to make the war (or is it over? not fully awake), so you could plan for them to try again after the war and maybe throw in a few cute sibling scenes. Alternatively, if you do plan on bringing in Sango and Miroku, since Miroku is a good well of advice, maybe he could give Inuyasha a bit of counsel on the situation. Also, you can't forget that Sesshomaru also needs to think about all of this; added to this is the fact that he desperately wants a good relationship with Inuyasha, so it could easily be said that he's putting more into the relationship than his brother. As a sidenote, I think the water nymph shouldn't have died. Maybe it could have just been a water clone, or his way of playing possum?

Whew. This is the longest review I've ever done but I really love this story. Hopefully all of this made sense.
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From Nesha85 on December 18, 2011
Great chapter. Soooo long. I loved the chapter and Sesshoumaru secret base.
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From itstartedwithapaopu on December 12, 2011
Before I go on and on about how amazing this fic is, I'm going to answer the questions you posed, because they are good ones and because you do strike me as an author who truly takes each suggestion into account.

I think that Miroku and Sango make a perfectly fine side-story, and if you can find a way to work them in that will help further along Inu Yasha's relationship with Sesshoumaru, then by all means, go ahead. It would help his trust in his brother greatly if Sango knew something about the Great Trial (I mean, demon slayers know a ton of shit that they don't talk about without needing to, right?) and could help put some of his fears at ease. They should have six children, with a seventh on the way--Miroku would waste no time knocking Sango up, after all, and in five years together, she has had enough time to pop out six of them.

I'm not sure how many more characters from the original story could show up, unless they were baddies that never got finished off, and I know there aren't many of those. I do like the incorporation of Kouga and Shippou, though. I was hoping they'd appear, and then they did! :D On that note, yes, I think they should keep appearing, if only to potentially give Sesshoumaru a romantic rival, or, barring that, to give Inu Yasha a hard time for being the bitch in the relationship. :3 Also, Shippou needs a home, and Sesshoumaru's other fox adviser (he has one, right, or am I confusing him with the fox Elder?) could use a protegee.

I don't think Yao Xin's children would be moved. I think they would be briefly chastised, but Sesshoumaru DID take their father from them, and their father DID abandon their home country to join teams with their most detested enemy. As sad as it will be for Yao Xin, I think they will have to be killed. HOWEVER, I think you could save him some undue stress if he were the one to make that decision; perhaps Sesshoumaru is trying very hard to keep them alive for Yao Xin, but his adviser realizes it is a wasted effort? I don't know. You're brilliant, whichever you decide will obviously work. :)

Lastly, please god keep their relationship going. I say this purely from a selfish standpoint, because you write smut so well, and DAMNIT I want to see Sesshoumaru take Inu Yasha, repeatedly and often. However, I realize that it... It is very difficult to write this, hold on. I believe it makes more SENSE if they take a rather awkward break, because Inu Yasha was unwilling, and sex doesn't magically break down barriers (though it should). He needs time to come to grips with his growing trust, with what happened, and with all that Sesshoumaru will certainly be doing/saying in an effort to gain his trust. Also, Sesshoumaru needs to angst a little while longer, because seeing him try to come to grips with the fact that he may (GASP) actually find Inu Yasha ATTRACTIVE is way hilarious.

Okay. I'm sorry that I just spammed the hell out of his review, lol, but your fic is so good!!! I can't help but imagine what I would do with it, but I know that whatever you write will be perfect because you certainly haven't disappointed me so far!

I eagerly await your next update. :)
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From calenloke on December 12, 2011
oh wow...Sesshoumaru really does love his brother that much to for an alpha like him to do that for Inuyasha. They have a long way to go...but the seem to be getting there slowly. :) I like it and can't wait to read more. Merry Christmas and Happy New Year!!!
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From ANON - kale on December 12, 2011
Inuyasha always has to fight everything. Even things that feel good.
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From Vyper on December 12, 2011
I so love this story. Sesshoumaru gives so much of himself and to let Inuyasha fuck him was beautiful. I can imagine his gorgeous face as he rode Inuyasha. Still, I would like to see Sesshoumaru take Inuyasha and it just sucks that we can't get a new chapter right now. Still, I understand. I had to put my writing on hold for a bit. Gotta pay bills and work ya know.
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From ajj77sunhawk on December 11, 2011
lol Good to know on the angst thing. Dont slow it down please its at a good pace, and Inu's heat is not done. Lol Sesshy is so good here, I really want Inu to want him, bad. change of heart stuff. Sad the Nymph died - jealous Sesshy would be fun. I do think bringing Kouga and Shippo into the story is a stretch, they are very on the side, and the story is about Inu. Having them visit is fine, but have a spin off that focuses on them if you want. Xin's kids... you call. Good job all around, and good fun.
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