Adult-FanFiction.org : Inuyasha / Yashahime

Reviews for Unforeseen Obstacles

By : Xakana

From YoukaiObsessed on July 19, 2005
Chapter 20 Wahoooooooo a lemon!! Again, I loved how you went into Sesshoumaru being hurt by Miroku�s words from earlier. How Miroku went to the youkai, asking for forgiveness, but not bowing down before him, still trying to keep his dignity intact. I was kinda shocked when Miroku was the topper!! 0_0.. OMR I have to wait ten chapters for a lemon?? I�m being slowly lemony tortureally teased!! *Ohhs I made up a word... hehe* Great chapters!!
Report Review
From YoukaiObsessed on July 19, 2005
Chapter 19..Ohhs Miroku was pushing it with Sesshoumaru. I almost felt sorry for him. It is good to see him stand up to Sesshoumaru, and stand up for his beliefs. *I was getting ready to hold the fence again. Yet, much to my delight, I see there is another chapter!!* (Runs off to read it... trips over fence)
Report Review
From ANON - Snowfall on July 19, 2005
Oh, I really do appreciate your portrayal of Inuyasha in his behavior toward Miroku. I really believe that he would try to help his friend, despite what others might think.

Snowfall aka Hanyou Slave
Report Review
From ANON - Snowfall on July 19, 2005
The lemons have been absolutely wonderful as have been the inner thoughts. I noticed that you added more descriptive detail in the last few chapters. Sess may be a bit devious, but his intentions aren't to harm Miroku. It was so sweet when Sess was finally forced to admit his love for Miroku and decided he could no longer keep his feelings to himself. It was sweet and believable when he said that he loved Miroku, but hated him too. It was nice that you didn't spend a lot of time drawing out the recombination of the group and I am glad that Miroku wasn't forced to make a choice. You really made me laugh with the whole scene of Sess giving Rin to Miroku. When he said he could give Miroku a daughter, I was really perplexed. Then when he offered up Rin, I laughed. And then to save Kohaku!? Wow. I think Sango needs to lighten up a bit. She shouldn't be hating him. He has spared Kohaku twice now! Even freed Kohaku from Naraku. Stubborn woman. I'd be so grateful, I'd forgive him just about anything. He never did anything to her that I remember. It just kinda ticked my off, not at you, but at her. Does that sound crazy or what? LOL I'm very happy that Sess and Miroku are enjoying each other again. It's great that you've shown some of Sesshoumaru's inner thoughts and let us see his concentration on Miroku. I would like to see what Miroku is thinking now. Are you going to keep this fic mostly focused on the couple or are we going to see more of their inner workings and interactions with the group?

You are taking this in a different route than most fics. You are solving problems rather than dragging the angst out far too long. And your chapters have plenty of meat in them. You don't leave the reader feeling shorted. I really like that as so many authors seem to be moving in the direction of not having hardly any progress with each chapter. I appreciate that you don't leave us feeling like we are being starved and hope that I haven't begun to do that. Mmm. I'll have to watch that one.

I really am enjoying this story and wait with anticipation for each new chapter, even though I haven't had much time to review lately.

Snowfall aka Hanyou Slave
Report Review
From ANON - kai on July 19, 2005
that is tru, anyways great update, so sesshy's plan worked, huh! i liked that sango said that at the end, 'hurt him, i hurt you' type of thing, i think it's cute and funny! i really enjoy your fic! update soon!!
Report Review
From ANON - bob on July 18, 2005
oh ok good...my brainache is gone..you have no idea how often i get those but i liked this chapter. i like they way youwrite about how sesshomaru will rationalizes things... wow i gave myself a brainache thinking about how to word that but anyway please continue!!
Report Review
From ANON - lilly on July 18, 2005
Oh, my. That certainly is a long response, but I do appreciate it. I actually did not realize that you also wrote Forbidden, since I read that one first. It really was a fantastic story. I applaud you for having original story ideas as well. I can imagine many varieties of hypotheticals spinning from a series, but I need to have a series to work with first. I can not just create original characters *sigh*. I find it interesting that you were a beta. I am sure you were good at it. Now, on to the review. Heavenly. I admit, I have considered the possibility of Sesshomaru helping Kohaku, but only if he were in the right mood, so to speak. You gave him excellent motivation, and I thoroughly enjoyed that. I also liked reading Sesshomaru's musings... you definitely kept him in character. Marvelous. And it was so nice to find an update when I got home from work. (I had such a hideous day at work, I seriously considered simply collapsing after I got home, but it seems that I am addicted as well... the computer called to me so temptingly... I had to come over and see if there was anything new.) I will continue to be your fan regardless of update schedules, but I must say that I am glad you aren't taking two years for this one. I am also glad that you know where the story is going. I am just enjoying the ride. [hmm, no sexual references intended] Okay, my brain is shutting down now. Until next time, dear lady. *returns hug*
Report Review
From ANON - shanna on July 18, 2005
Um, you like my sugar highs? Okay, whats that mean... *goes to read other reviews* OH! Cool people are noticing me... well, I'm really really impressed by lilly's grammar (are you a teacher cuz if you are that would soooo totally mess me up XD) anyway I cant help it if i'm liike totally hyper after reading this way cool story (with way constant updates that are sooo nice). Dude, (actually, dudess) I sooo can not believe that it took you two years to finish a story. Wow, guess its a good thing I'm not reading that one right now... well, I've actually thought about Sesshomaru taking Kohaku's shard and saving him before cuz it seems possible to me. and (in a weird kinda way) we actually are getting *some* flowers and sunshine XD and you write almost as much reader response as you do actual chapter but I really like it. *fluttering off now, back later* *sneaks back for a glomp attack* =D
Report Review
From YoukaiObsessed on July 18, 2005
Haha you sound like me about how much you watch TV, if I�m not working, I only turn it on for the News, CSI and Adult swim or to play Final Fantasy and Mortal Kombat! OMR, did I really review on both sites?? Haha, well that shows you, it was a great story!! The Naraku story you did was perfect!! *Gasp, me a hentai? Feigns innocent look*

Ohhs sneaky assed Sesshoumaru! I loved his thoughts on his deeper motivations, and his moments of jealously. ! His sneaky assed plan worked to his advantage!! Those were excellent! That was great when Sesshoumaru realized, he is just like his father and brother now. I am glad he saved Kohaku! On what Sango did, that was really good; I love how you do realistic approaches to uneasy situations. She said thank you, yet she still let him know, she's basically watching his ass closely. *Well I would also, but for other reasons... hentai thoughts* Ohhs what a long review!!
Report Review
From ANON - Kira on July 18, 2005
YAY! you updated!! i feel all warm and fuzzy now. ^w^ *huggles* dont stop updateing or i shall take you off the list....wait.....can it be a list if only one person is on it?!?!?! *eye twiches* AAAAAA! (im very hyper right now. I saw charle and the chocolate factory and sittign fro that long, in a dark place....it does things to me....makes me hyper....) YAY! great story!!!!!!

oh, and if you dont know, huggle = hug + tackle...hahahahahahahahaha!!!!
Report Review
From ANON - kai on July 18, 2005
you should do one!! XDDD but i liked how you did this one too! anyways great update, looks like the brothers have an understanding and all! update soon!
Report Review
From YoukaiObsessed on July 18, 2005
I love how you went into how things have changed so much in the past 500 years *the beauty of the land* Poor Miroku is so torn between Sesshoumaru and Sango!! Very realistic approach on how you lose one love to go to another, yet wonder about the maybes, what if ect Ohhs a perverted thought of a 3-way with the 3 parties involved entered my perverted mind *like that's something new for me to have hentai thoughts... shifty eyes* Great job once again! *stands on fence and looks over cliff*
Report Review
From ANON - bob on July 18, 2005
you're cnfusing me now! are miroku and sango gonna be together or is it just going to be sesshomaru and miroku?? you're giving me a brainache but please continue!! i'm addicted this story!!
Report Review
From ANON - anon on July 18, 2005
hi... i just want to say that you are a good writer and i like your story... um, yeah... that's it... i can't write alot like others do... but its a good story, it really is, i like it
Report Review
From ANON - lilly on July 17, 2005
Well, here I am reviewing again on the same day. (This is by no means a complaint, dear authoress.) After reading your 'reviewer responses' I decided to actually go and read all the reviews before writing mine. I don't usually do that. It is interesting that so many people are religiously following this story. And I have actually *seen* the commercial Kira was referring to. (You have seen those water commercials, haven't you?) And Shanna seems to be high on sugar but I won't complain since she writes long reviews just like I do. And bob faithfully reviews everytime. Kudos for consistency. Now, on to the review. Your descriptions are exquisite and quite beautiful, and I'm slightly jealous over your writing ability. My muse only comes out for reviews, it seems. I happen to think that you are very good at writing fluffy moments, and I'm sure others would agree. I'm a little more selective in the fanfics I read. I can't read angst that goes over the top, and sometimes a PWP will just seem to lose my interest after a few pages. I do agree on the AU though. Especially for Inuyasha, because I love the kanon so much. AU just doen't work for me. And I *can* read a story that hasn't been edited/beta-ed, but most of the time I choose not to, simply because it irks me to read around a 'copious amount' of errors. But don't have low self-esteem, you are a sensational writer and I am thoroughly enjoying reading your work. Feel free to write as much as you want.
Report Review