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From jdbbrz27 on November 12, 2010
Oh I am so excited hopefully Sessh. will lower the boom on Manten and I am so excited and I can't wait for the next update oh my this story is getting pretty good. Way to go Jinenji I am soooooo proud of him I hope he continues to be as brave as possible to keep Inuyasha safe and getting healthy. It's silly but I really am getting very excited about this story thank you oh great writer.
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From ANON - angelsword on November 12, 2010
I love this story, enough that instead of waiting to check for new chapters in the morning, I start refreshing from midnight. Tonights chapter came through at 1.30 and was worth it. though if you start to miss days as you did yesterday for the sake of work I might have to force myself to wait until morning (1.30 is morning isn't it? :-))
(I'd don't know what time it is for you but I'm in Western australia, still it's worth it)
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From ANON - Snowfall on November 12, 2010
Ah! I was just doing some re-reading and I absolutely love how you portrayed Jinenji attempting to order the poor little nurse to divulge her secret. It was so cute and sweet! Really well done! Now, I'm going back to study the interactions between Inuyasha's aspects. My brain keeps taking short vacations, but meds will be here in a week or two and then I won't have to put so much effort into seeing everything! Yay!
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From jdbbrz27 on November 11, 2010
That was amazing and so dramatic I was breathless by the end of it. I just got a chance to read the last 5 chapters or so I've been to busy lately and they were amazing. Loved the tribute gifts great idea and Sessh's reaction when he finally saw Inuyasha for the first time priceless. I hate Manten and hopes he suffers a bit before death. I loved Jinenji what a sweetheart and only a real healer with one who heals with their mind and soul and not just their knowledge would be able to be so connected with death as to follow it's leads. I love how you described death and it's reluctance to take Inuyasha's soul. I can't blame the little raccoon nurse she isn't all that sharp obviously and most would be reluctant to go against someone who is higher up in the heirechy so I'm thrilled Jinenji kind of sort of ordered it from her kind of. I will be waiting for the next update and for Sessh's return I really am getting into this story and I didn't think I would.
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From ANON - delishka on November 11, 2010
is it sad that I'm refreshing your author page ever half hour on the chance that you've updated? I'm really enjoying your work.
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From Aalto on November 11, 2010
I like how fast you updated. Also you write well. I can hardly wait to 'see' Seshys reaction to what Manten did! Pleasepleaseplease update quikly!
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From quittie on November 11, 2010
I've read strength! Actually I was reading it before survive... and I always check if you already updated! ahahha! and silly me, It was then that I realize that both of the story was authored by you! I'm such a fan! More power!
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From ANON - river girl on November 11, 2010
Thank you for filling in the gap! I didn't doubt you.

I LOVED this new chapter. The healer has a beautiful soul. And your depiction of death and how death interacts with the healer, oddly calming and respectful. I don't know if its all the time I've spent in Asia and the concept of the wheel of life or what, but it drew me in.

I'm sitting here just being happy with this new developement, almost like an emotional crash after the last chapter. I want the next chapter, and I have all sorts of curious questions about how Inuyasha will wake up and the consequences for certain unsavory characters. At the moment, I feel like your healer must feel, relief, even knowing the storms not over.

One odd questions, after all this time, will Inuyasha be able to handle kindness?
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From ANON - starlight on November 11, 2010
I really enjoyed this new chapter!! I love the way you mentioned what Inuyasha had been up to for the last nine days without dragging it on. I'm also very satisfied with the twist, of course I couldn't help but hope for Sesshoumaru, but the new twist was definitely acceptable! I liked the suprise! And you didn't have to put the warning in, it would have been more suspenseful without it (but I was so eager to read this chapter I totally skipped over the warning at first anyway!). Great job and I can't wait for when Sesshoumaru and Inuyasha finally encounter each other once again (though I do realize it probably won't be next chapter...)!! Keep up the wonderful work!
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From Cinder1013 on November 10, 2010
I love it! Jinenji's role is great. I certainly want to see Manten get what he deserves. I'm also doing a nano, but I'm not as far along as you are. Great progress.
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From dino1 on November 10, 2010
I love your stories. I also like that you had a chapter dedicated to a minor character in the series. I'm glad that and i like the fact he can see death. I can see that in a healer. I can't wait till next chapter.
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From ANON - river girl on November 09, 2010
I think the angst was right, for the events in this chapter. Manten has nine days to be stupid. I wonder very much if he will actually be able to contain himself and not return time and again to taunt Inuyasha. I was somewhat surprised at the end, with the dominant selfs exceptence of death. It wasn't mentioned when the four where speaking and seems as if they weren't aware of the deadline at all. Looking back with that information, it seems that Yasha has chosen to die with Iny and Inuyasha, thus condemning Pup to die as well. Which seems in line with Yasha's 'heart' if you will. Pup would be devastated if any of the personalities failed and balance is the only way he's maintained hismelf. I felt teary at the end though, as Inuyasha calmly thought about embracing Pup at least and fading as Yasha dealth with the pain of death. I wanted to pick him and hold him and tell him he didn't have to. You're tearing me up here, honestly.

I shudder at the thought of Sesshemoru's rage. How Manten ever got this stupid, I can't begin to guess, an unhealthy overdose of arrogance, possibly. But I totally believe it. It's in no way unbelievable. I wondered though, how Manten is going to deal with the nurse. Is she dead by now, will he kill her, because that's the biggest hole in the story he spun to Inuyasha. Also, Inuyasha hasn't completely delt with that problem. He seems unable to focus on it and just went on. Not that I blame him.

Soaking your hands in warm salt water might revive your ability to type, a very necessary and desired outcome!
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From trystkinkou on November 09, 2010
*sniff* *sniff* mewwww... i think the angst was a little low but still hard hitting. i liked how you did the meeting of minds it really brought out the visuals. i can't wait til next .
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From ANON - Caitriona on November 09, 2010
Chapter 7

AHHHHHHH. NOOOOOOOEEEEEEESSSSSSSS.

Ok. Now that I have that out of my system -- onto the review. You did a wonderful job of writing Manten as a whining, self-loathing, sycophantic, sniveling, little piece of crap who can only prove his own self worth by demeaning and degrading others. At this point, if he were real, I am sure that your readers would have snipped him into little pieces for the worms to eat. He has taken everything that Sesshoumaru did and turned it into crap. grrrrr. I just don't know how to exactly express my displeasure in the actions of the character. Don't get me wrong. You did a wonderful job of it. He just irritates the living hell out of me.

I found the initial reaction of Yasha to be wonderfully done. I look at Yasha as being almost like his Id. It knows what it wants and it just can't understand why it didn't go the way it wanted. The personalities of Inuyasha didn't have a real childhood, so it is understandable why this more animalistic portion of his mind would try to turn on itself when things don't go it's way. The ensuing conversation between the human, youkai, and hanyou portions of his mind was sad to read. While I have to wonder just what would have happened if the youkai portion had taken the hanyou's suggestion, I'm glad that it talked itself out of the whole thing.

Pup's comment about the group hug really made me smile. It was one of the few really uplifting sections of this otherwise angsty chapter. kawaii koinu!

The last few sentences of this really tugged at the old heartstrings. (and the angst strings as indicated by the first comment in this sections) Inuyasha's plan to merge with his past and then die was terribly sad. It makes me want to beat Manten a little more...

At this point I see only a few options. First, the nurse could wake up and tell them that Inuyasha didn't attack her. I don't see her doing that because you describe her as quiet and meek. That kind of person might not stand up for another when they are being brow beaten. It is more likely that she will try to tell the truth once and then Manten will twist it to suit his preconceived ideas. Second, Inuyasha could last the 9 days - growing weaker and weaker - and then when a guard or something notices him going terribly downhill they call Manten who relaxes his iron fist. I don't see this happening because that would mean the idiot would have to admit that he had done something wrong. He would more likely kill the guard to protect himself and try to say that Inuyasha did it! Third, Sess could show up at the last minute and nurse the incredibly ill hanyou turned human back to help. This seems slightly trite, and you have been great for throwing me curveballs, so I don't see this one happening. Fourth, Inuyasha could die.

and that would suck.

So, I guess I'm saying that your work has me thinking and worrying about the characters and wondering what you are going to do. Huzzah!

Thanks for writing for us!
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From ANON - angelsword on November 09, 2010
I don't know what sort of angst you were planning, this was enough to make me cry,I don't know if my heart could take more angst. Loving the story so far, please keep writing.
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